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Thread: Blood loss

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    BRB, Jumping Ship Baron Mynd's Avatar
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    Blood loss

    been bleeding out emotionally. pick at the scabs
    find what’s hidden in blackness only hints at your past
    broken mirror in bathroom reflects punched holes in the wall
    socially awkward, tough to hang it up when nobody calls you
    ghost in the halls. bodachian bard, tears choked back on cigars
    scabs become scars. daydrinking til i crack glass into shards
    hand me your arm. pass me a marker, let me doodle graffiti
    beautifully neat ballpoint Bicasso about to lose it completely
    stupidly genius. the two things are equal parts of my sum
    dual intermediates. hearty assumptions
    started from nothing
    a cathartic conundrum. purgative drug gateway to the world that i love
    seismic surface eruptions. handquakes as you’re turning this up
    searching for something. someone. somewhere in the distance
    unaware of what’s missing, blank faced we stare into pictures
    scared of admitting it’s easier not to hope for the best
    copious mechanisms over-employed to refocus our efforts
    holding our breath in the face of adversity. nobodies left
    every stone that we’ve stepped on overturned. emotionless wreck
    growths introspective. hold it against me, a welcome embrace
    from the hells that we’ve faced. smiles flash in selfish distain
    seldomly safe in my own thoughts. drown inside my cerebral
    the silence unequal to recurring themed dreams blighted by evil
    mind who your people are, keep your friends close as your word
    nobodies perfect. especially all of those that know me in person
    show me your worst. I wanna see the real you at your lowest
    truthfully knowing someone takes time and the proofs in the showing
    you should just open up. the difference between the real and the fake
    is feeling their pain as the adrenalines released from your veins

    blood loss

    WORD P e r f e c t !


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    Re: Blood loss

    Good shyt, at the end of the day.. Well-structured piece, with all the usual multi's as one would expect from a typical textcee, I guess. That's the only thing that made it kinda bog-standard for me, its that almost predictable textcee flow which LOADS of you guys do. I've been seeing that style since the early 2000s. And then its this obfuscating fog that clouds the whole piece, which I struggle get through, in parts, to actually understand what you're saying. Like wtf is a 'bodachian bard'? Maybe i'm just not well-read enough, but all this stuff is not accessible to the average reader (who doesn't frequent rap forums). Overall, decent. My favourite part: 'emotionless wreck, growths introspective. hold it against me'...I really felt that particular section.

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