Born in Shackles

**Ginger** · July 2nd, 2007, 04:12 PM

My life, an endless abyss
Full of dread and shame
Born to a goblin & witch
Petrified, not knowing whats next
Will I have to eat the crumbs
Will I have to slaughter a child
Or will I just have to beg for mercy.....

Chained like a dog, washing scum off of toes
Not knowing if i was even alive
Dead.....oh how I wish I was dead
I scream for pity as I watch my sister die
Could I be next? Will I be lucky this time
There's no use, luck is a mere thought of man
But mankind, well atleast what I thought I knew
..Can it be any worse? Is EVERYBODY a hostage!
I hope I can escape this horror
Flee from a never ending nightmare
Today I write to you good fellow
Not to brag or boast
Only to ask for a chance
Maybe.....just maybe justice can prevail
These shackles, they control me
Is there a way I can ask them to let go?.....

Dad has caught me
I now write to myself in my head
My diary was burned and relinquished
No matter how hard I tried to save it
Father won, then I received another brutal beating
But here is the catch my friend
I am not a boy, nor am I a girl
I cannot see nor speak
I am simply a fragment of your imagination
A lost memory if I shall say
To whom I might overcome
The brain I takeover
The mind I tackle
Will ALWAYS know
There ARE some angels born in shackles

-billy

**Ginger** · July 2nd, 2007, 04:16 PM

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ys-341008.html

**Ginger** · July 2nd, 2007, 04:17 PM

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...es-340380.html

**P. Mortuus** · July 2nd, 2007, 04:36 PM

I read your piece and i liked it. Though there was something here which i can't put my finger on however, the language was polished in my opinion

Originally Posted by billy

No matter how hard I tried and save it

Shouldn't that say I tried to save it and not and.....

Other than that i found the piece easy on the eyes and brain lol... I didn't get the ending though...i don't know, maybe i've been out of the poetry circle that i've lost the sight of thingslol, anyhow....i found the description was good and adequate and added to the piece well.

All in all, a good and easy to read piece. Nice job.

**Ginger** · July 2nd, 2007, 10:37 PM

Thanks, uppin.

**Ginger** · July 3rd, 2007, 03:08 PM

Dammit feed. I'll rtf.

**Diversed** · July 3rd, 2007, 04:15 PM

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...up-340726.html - feed this..

I liked this man, i didn't even know you wrote poetry but now i know. This piece had a gorey type feel to it that I liked, but the diction was a bit off at times. This piece possed anlot of raw emotive lines and that put a pretty straight forward picture in my head as I was reading good job mayne..