Need some tips on audios

[Premiumm]

Basically posting here because I KNOW it is not top notch and looking for ways to improve on it, improve on lyrics, quality, etc. Critique away I enjoy criticism. Also give some tips if you can. Im currently getting Logic Pro so if anyone has that tutorials/tips would be greatly appreciated

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Lyrics:

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the arch nemesis with offensive spits so remember this
i dismember cliques an leave the crew lookin ridiculous
fightin amputees for a couple ample fees
when i go rhino flow i jus trample emcees wit ease
my wordplay increase an it make my piece deep
you quiet like the EKG machine ceased beeps
release heat at every emcee thats thinks he's
the dopest round take his crown put em in the ground
please freeze…an c'mon right back,
i fight tracks, comin with more than light attacks
hit wit switch blades, till the metal knick an richochet
my rhymes told im blindfolded swingin every which way
hit the world tasmanian spin im zany within
a lunatic sick as a sin
with weight on my shouldas an a boulda on the pen
imma monster my necks got bolts on the end

[BozKurt]

flow is on point my dude .. lyrics keepin it real respect that ... you got a good rap voice .. mixing can use help like making it sound into the beat if u understand what i mean... so far so good tho keep em comin

[KopyWright]

if you need Logic

[KopyWright]

sry, but have you gotten logic yet because thats what I use and I could help you out in basically anything you need bruh

[KopyWright]

cuz I've got the new update for Logic 9 so just hit me up if you need anything bro

[KopyWright]

and now I can finally vote, sry for this free post tho

[Premiumm]

i jus finished installing logic 9

[The Nav Man™]

Lol. Its not too bad Premiumm, just polish it up a bit, make your words a little more clear if you can. Got some cool multies and shit homie. Keep doin it n holla at me for a collab haha. Not too bad at all man, shouldn't be in EE, just put some more effort into it and rap the shit like you mean it.

[Premiumm]

thanks bro appreciate it an yea im down for a collab anytime honestly...i think once i fine tune my delivery an shit ill be a problem haha