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    Illness

    i harness the power lyin dormant in the brain
    i tarnish and scour lyers, engorgin them in pain
    i brandish weapons, makin troubles just vanish
    to make pain, i break brains like puzzles in spanish
    i snap backs for practice, provin darwin's theory
    spin evolution in backflips till speds are thinkin clearly
    I dilate ya eyes, wait.. lets leave it for now
    i'll vibrate ya migrane like speakers kickin poor sound/
    I go with flow kinda like rastas and pot
    you stay searchin for illness, i cough it in drops
    never enter this bombfest with the wrong concepts
    your left a harmless target takin elbows like an armrest
    I own the microphone and will flatten ya dome
    im untouchable like the men who captured capone
    im back in the zone, gifted wit lifted lyrics
    high above ya dome, like shifted spirits
    droppin hot sound expandin forward poppin ya
    bringin apocalypse now like francis ford coppolla
    crowds fall to my might, when I bawl on the mic
    its all in my sight, the force of nature stalls when i write/
    Ill cut ya eyes in half, leave ya blind to rap
    When I spit more lines than a seismograph
    Ill divide ya mass, I speak faster, and snap ya knees
    Cuz Im known to eat rappers like the Japanese
    Ya facade with fade away like a played charade
    Grenades and saber blades to spray ya brains
    as ya thoughts fade, i stand with weapons raised
    blessed and praised, I stare with a menacin gaze
    you cats are lackin any form of elevation
    cuz with game like iverson, you still couldnt understand penetration
    theres only one master of rap, never packin a gat
    as a matter of fact, im badder than that
    ill shatter your back and prove that your chatter is wack
    ill unleash my bladder and sack to scatter your pack
    your nothin but rats, infested emcees
    now you wanna hop on my ship just to spread your disease
    but menacing steez are embedded in me
    which means, that yall kids aint as reckless as me
    nobodys as elevated as this illest kids raps
    and ive been delegated to tell you the facts
    i relish in that, just credit the mack for settin it back
    cuz I rock with illness, like medical crack
    time is endless, and I shine excessive
    blindin the eyes of those who defy my lessons
    for many lifes a curse, but mines a blessing
    your skill is waning, you I divide like crescents
    I spew sporadic mathematics at you rap addicts
    and add up my allies that spin on this axis
    check the facts kid, i rule supreme like abraxas
    my rhyme lashes are more blinding than a cataract is
    ive done enough to retire, though still in my prime
    cuz ill be bringin in mad dough, millions in time
    standin still in the lime-light, killin wit rhymes
    like sick in the dictionary cuz im illness defined

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    Re: Illness

    uppn for some feed

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    Re: Illness

    Quote Originally Posted by The Lyricist 2
    i brandish weapons, makin troubles just vanish
    to make pain, i break brains like puzzles in spanish
    DOPE^^^^^ NICE METAPHORE WITH WITTY LIL PUNCH

    Quote Originally Posted by The Lyricist 2
    never enter this bombfest with the wrong concepts
    your left a harmless target takin elbows like an armrest
    ANOTHER DOPE BAR^^^^^^^

    Quote Originally Posted by The Lyricist 2
    standin still in the lime-light, killin wit rhymes
    like sick in the dictionary cuz im illness defined
    ^^^IGHT BAR


    U CAME REALLY STRONG IN THE FIRST PART BUT ENDED POORLY IN MY OPINION ALSO THIS IS A VERY TYPICAL FLEX UR OWN EGO KINDA DROP MAYBE TRY EXPANDING UR MIND SET TO A HIGH LEVEL AND TRY THINKING OUTSIDE OF THE BOX UMMMM FLOW IT WAS LIKE A RIVER STRUCTURE WAS SOLID TO SOME QUOTEABLE LINES IN HERE AND ALSO SOME BLAH 1's TOO FOR EXAMPLE


    Quote Originally Posted by The Lyricist 2
    ive done enough to retire, though still in my prime
    cuz ill be bringin in mad dough, millions in time
    ^^^^ VERY SIMPLE RHYME SCHEME ALSO I THINK U JUST PUT IT IN JUST CAUSE IT SEEMED LIKED IT FIT THERE.......THERE WAS ALOT OF FILLER BARS THAT DIDN'T NEED TO BE THERE WELL HOPE THIS FEED IS SUFFICE
    Last edited by Anonymous 1; February 1st, 2009 at 01:13 PM

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    Re: Illness

    This was decent... the 1st bar had a nice line-line rhyme scheme and then you switched it up for the rest of the piece (for the better mostly). There were a couple creative punchlines in there that spiced things up, like the two that anonymous 1 pointed out... the flow was there throughout.

    This was a decent piece, but nothin really made this stand out from all the other shit... you'd do better recording this than just leaving this as an open mic.

    Still, not bad, not bad at all... O/A I thought this was a 7/10... stay up


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