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    last weekend (true story)

    im back from my travels and g uess what i saw
    ghetto birds gyrating, niggas backs to the wall
    condominium wit marble halls some sophistication
    silent elation, jumped in no hesitation
    on a 4 day weekend away from my sullen city
    enough miles for 2 flights my brother comin wit me
    his eyes as wide as minefor us both the first time
    livin this lavishly my nigga is in his prime
    invitation like nigga stay as long as u like
    as for this party rite here this jus a night in my life
    party ran til like 5 in the mornin
    niggas yawnin and snorin
    and crashed out on the couches and flooring
    made it clear i get my own bedroom those he has 4 of
    swore i traveled a mile 2 the kitchen 2 get some water
    jaccuzzi and a lounge enclosed inside my quaters
    when i awoke it was spotless 3 maids and 2 porters
    a doorman and a butler to get whatever he order
    a personal assistant that did whatever he thought of
    a myriad of cars and none of em self driven
    the maybach, the phantom, the rolls this plush livin
    he own half the island this nigga is self risen
    how he amass all this without goin 2 prison
    came in the game together his cheddar inflated bigger
    now he livin on an island and me i jus visit
    picture that
    Last edited by the_origin; January 8th, 2008 at 12:44 AM Reason: spelling
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    Re: last weekend (true story)

    I just wasn't feeling this... you had no multis, similies
    or anything that would interest an MC. I advice you keep
    practicing and Im sure sooner or later it'll hit you...

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