you too homie dope battle upp1
Assasiin
Comrad
uppin this shit man....................#1 man............................................... ........
ARTIFICIAL | PO'ETHICS | INTELLIGENCE
Vote - Comrad...
I just typed a long ass explanation and somehow got logged out. So, here's how i saw this topical.
Mechanics - Comrad
Structure - Comrad
Vocab - Assasiin
Dope ass battle, just think comrad came with the better topical in this one. No hate.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=272407
Honest Vote^
*i'll poll when u leave an honest vote*
pz
frre up
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vote comrad hands down i feel he was on with the topic, and kept my eyes on the screen, not bad from the other homie i feel you could have put more effort into this, but neway decent between both but my vote already went to com, good structure etc...
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vote on my open battles HONESTLY & dont 4get to poll ya votes drop linx, pz
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Good Drop by Both...You both did Really good in your Verses....I cant vote tho cuz Crew...
RB OG Triple OG
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[Font=Book Antiqua] Vote: Comrad
Your wordplay was overall better. Vocab Was Good. You Went with the topic alot better.
The Other Guy Had A Okay Topic. He Didnt Do As Well As He Could Have.
Metas// Comrad
Flow//Comrad
Wordplay//Comrad
Strucutre//Comrad
uhh ...
Trying to become free,Looking has failed,Looking at different aspects.
Tortured within,These sins and thoughts,That has held me captive.
Starting to remeber,Was in a war,Tho wondering why did i fought?
Caught moments,Wrote them down,Two diarys,For my two thoughts.
Tho still stuck,In a mentel hospital,I have dreams tho they feel real.
As i take my pills i contemplate,Why is my identity consealed?
Why does my heart peal in two,Why i try to remeber i feel shamed?
Damed into reality,Was i just born to fight,Was i even named?
Tho one day was in my room,Minding my own bussiness..........
Trying to stick my mind together,Then someone came to visit.
Claim his was a old friend,And knew details of my forgotten flash.
At last,I will know the truth,Tho he said it was a rotton past.........
I asked why Do i have two different voices talking inside my head.
He lead me to confusion,Said maybe it cause you left a family dead.
^Just dope.. that was nice. I followed every single line there. This battle was kind of weak because you both fell off bad on flow at some points. But you both kept a decent storyline going. This part from comrad is bout near the only part I didn't fall off on.. decent battle.. not perfect.
V/Comrad
dam! com u a dope topical head! u take this shiit eazi for better meta's.. they was niice.. u had a better flow structure & wordplay.. i enjoyed readin ya shiit.. niice topical battle mayne..
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