The schizophrenic phantom..

[Sincerly]

who are you?

A schizophrenic batman robbin hoods to dissect insect injected sections
A zymogenic madman intergrated my intellect to incest infected fictions
Inflect the stab knife to eject the rejects and collect borrowed breaths
Ressurect their sad lives as the lab light repress the shadows of death
Set all breadspots to shred plots the sniper got lead locked to red dots
Spread off headshots at dreadnoughts leave the dead crops to get rot
Betrayed the evil spell that impelled rebells to slay the obeyed portray
Today the demons fell, oneway the devil got played now its hell to pay

All wannabe foreigners gonna need coroners as the set parks get dark
Drag fancy hoes by their panty hoes leaving nothing but stretch marks
Insert scratch needles to wack wrists the hippop junkies need rap hits
Attach weed to tracklists with doperhymes tight its needless to wrap it
The retarded gutter bitch wanna hold her ground but she's on the dick
Scarred a whore hardcore.. cut her lips like butter bricks shut her quick
Relentless pleasance the senseless essence of my unblessed presence
Less credence the absurd verbs consequences my final death sentence

[J.Christ]

how many drops are you going to have ?
and you need 2 links son .

[Sincerly]

Here you go, son.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...21#post3931821
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...44#post3931844

[J.Christ]

Ok. you stretch your lines like there is no tomorrow, you need not to that .
the structure of this was ass others will let you know

The retarded gutter bitch wanna hold her ground but she's on the dick
Scarred a whore hardcore.. cut her lips like butter bricks shut her quick

you supposed to be sincere or is that name a metaphor or something, overall you can come harder you need to work on ya rhyme scheme as well .

Keep trying .

[Sincerly]

haha

[soberSEOULja]

good doubles, and word usage, but you have absolutely no plot, shitty structure, no flow, just not much of anything, it just looksl ike you took a dictionary and looked up words taht sounded like each other or rhymed and put them together....ill congratulate you on your skills with rhyming...bleh

[Siege]

you need to work on ya rhyme scheme as well .

Keep trying .

what the fuck? this rhyme scheme was pertfect and it helped it flow very well, he does audio, so you can stretch your bars that far in text, especially with all those dope multies, good vocabulary as well, try writing on a deeper topic next time, but nice verse

[Sincerly]

"but you have absolutely no plot, shitty structure, no flow, just not much of anything"


Haha whats up with all the kids here?

First, a text does not have to have a plot.

Second, if you fail to see the flow n structure here you dont have any idea what youre talking bout, seriously..


btw: tnx Siege, u know whats up..

[Muweed]

ahuh its easy to spit,
when u see other ppls shit...
brrrr.......bruupp!!

[Marshall]

Wow, you uses Multies in most lines but they fitted in perfectly. your flow was brilliant because of this. really liked this piece. keep it up.