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Thread: They Say I'm 'Anorexic'

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    They Say I'm 'Anorexic'

    They Say Im 'Anorexic'

    My yellowing skin is thinning now, dragged tight over my brittle bones,
    And pinned in places where it tore, and stapled poorly,sharp on stone,
    Alone with the glint of the looking-glass, in a lurid chamber far from home,
    My paper heart flapping in it's hollow mould, I'm 'Anorexic', so I'm told..
    Snaked over my arms and feet, like rustling demons, underneath these sheets,
    They drape the wires forcing food, they rob me of my choice to eat,
    Meaningless, bleak existence, for the frustration of a deep control,
    To be in charge, of who I was, and achieve my strictest goals,
    Now nothing is within my power, they broke, they beat, they ripped me down,
    They spat on all my effort, they hid my dignity beneath this dappled gown.
    I hate the obese teenager, that extends her tongue as I dare a glance,
    Her tumbling curves, her teasing eyes, that embarrass me, that boyish stance,
    That lax and loathsome habit, the daily binge, the evening purge,
    The weakness of her oily heart, the futility of that consuming urge.
    My progress here is limited, and will be until I make them see..
    The fat girl in the mirror, that nobody notices... but me.
    Hello Darkness My Old Friend...I've Come To Talk With You Alone

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    Hello Darkness My Old Friend...I've Come To Talk With You Alone

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    someone fancy dropping a reply to this one? I don't mind replying to yours in turn.
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    wtf @ ur topic.
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    Pretty creative I like some new shit


    need vote: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268198
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    wtf @ the type of shit niggas sit down write and think abou nowadays
    actually spit that shit in audio and niggas would think that you even more crazy.
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    well I got replies at least, and for the record its called 'fiction', isn't the whole point of origionality to produce something that millions of people haven't done before you? If you'd prefer I could write the usual 'gangsta' shit, but thats not me, I'm wierd, my writing is wierd, you didn't have to enter the thread, but you did, something obviously drew you in.
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    yo i liked this one. it had imagery vocab an it flowed very well. an hip-hop is about doin somethin no one else has done before you an i respect that you don't do that fake studio gangsta shit. i do it sometimes but the shit i say is trill. but i like this one cause you did ya thang on it an it was different. just keep doin ya thang dawg. peace out

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    ^theres someone who respects origionality, thanks alot man.
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    imagery ws gd
    rhymin ws bit simple
    flow ws gd
    structure also ws gd
    i liked this drop
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    keep at it

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    thanks alot
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