"Paper Weight"

[Atti]

I am your paper;
Crimson tissue ribbons the presence within.
Open me up... this deeper essence is all yours.
Treat my like your little nothing, you stupid bitch.
Tear at my everything for the sake of your happiness.
You have broken tread of the shallow waiting pool...
As the helpless leap frog rips at the surface.
And You, fucking whore, swim to the bottom of that barrel.

I am your paper;
Bend me, break my spirit... Please do it.
Tell yourself im happy in your chosen form.
Twist my fragile self until I begin to tear at the seam,
don't stop the abuse until I'm to flimsy to work.
Until your play thing is mangled and useless.
Im your jagged sheet of nothingness, of imperfection,
so much so that now the fold is my all...
Thought of giving you paper would be to dance with insanity.

I am your ____ ;
Lonley, ink stained and tattered is your masterpiece.
Searching for the helping hand of another,
another to make me their dream and build my nightmare.
I'm no longer your paper... MANIPULATIVE BITCH!
Very thought of your fingertip along my side makes me kringe,
and your firey memory sets fire to my paper heart.
Cold and lonely... I am but the amputee's origami.
Forged no more by the brittle fingertips of judgment,
as a new element reaches to tend the wounds.
The gentle whisper of a warmth kisses the cold...
My, this sweatshirt wears so beautifully.
Need not birth alter ego, the perfection is now my choosing.
Now I watch one bend to me... and the transition is seamless.

[FUBAR]

I really didn"t understand what your trying to say....but, if I read it correctly,
your girl raped you mentaly. aside from understanding it, this was good.

[Atti]

*Wonders Were The Beating Came From*

Eerm, No.

She Wanted Me To Be Something I Wasnt,
And Then She Ended Up Cheating I Me.

[NaS]

Crimson tissue ribbons the presence within.

Didn't really understand that line other then imagery where theres a red ribbon around a piece of rolled paper, but "Crimson tissue ribbons the presence within." the crimson tissue is the presence within?

Also, I think this piece was just hard to understand, not saying make it simpler, but it could use re-wording restructuring to make it easier to follow. What I did understand from this piece is a person using you till theres nothing left, taking everything away, until you left that person, where you no longer belong to her.

Try re-writing the piece, im sure if you put some more time/effort into it it will come out alot better. Nice topic/idea.

[Atti]

Crimson tissue = Red Tissue Paper
... Alot Of Times Its Used To Wrap or 'Ribbon' Something,
Making That Something The 'Presence Within'.

[Atti]

... Upping.