I thought this was pretty nice, the vocab stood out the most to me, introspective type piece which i like to do when i write deeper shit.
The story was told well some good imagery mixed in, the only thing i could say to you was keep the flow a bit more consistent the flow was nice till half way through then you seemed to get inconsistent with it.
Keep Dropping.
nice 1 bro.
keep em comin
I felt like u was speakin 2 me dawg. Rap is the anomaly of music and for us rappers we gotta work twice as hard as any musician to be takin serious and not looked at as a drain on society, But like i said i felt that piece
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yeh keep ur chin up. nice 1
keep em comin
ne more feedbak guys?
this was okay yamean.. work with the struture tho the flow of it wasnt good but the vocab was okay it was good at certain angles but you need to elevate tho
hit this up, itz my piece
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=228028
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nice 1.
keep em comin
wow that was actually pretty good i liked it you have an amazing multie sceme going there i liked it ur idea concepts flowed and it was just ill it was slighly above avg vocab but other then that dopeness in a jar
Just Dope.
Nice 1 bro, always means alot to know peeps enjoy readin my stuff.
Yeh my vocab is wat im wrkin on.
Keep em comin guys
Originally Posted by ~ladie_streetz~
^no shut up. I bet you didnt even read it.. This doesnt need elvation. Vocab and structure was good and flow was on. I think you came in here to get a post. You Suck.
Dat wa what's up. I really like dat piece
yo i think it wuz ill how u were rhymin like 3 words at a time dat shits hard but i also just started rappin so i aint an expert and yo if u wanna give me sum tips wit me up
one CA$H :insane:
Last edited by ca$banks; September 1st, 2005 at 03:29 AM
nice rhymes, must be real tight when sung, not written
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man how many times you gon write posts likie "uppin", "keep em goin", "dont sleep on me"??? damn u just gettin yoself more posts man! wtf, thats so lame!
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i know soz i forgot how many times i posted shit like tat, didnt do it on purpose.
Thnx for the feedbak guys.
ca$hbanks, cnt really fink of tips but, jst keep writin and think of a long sylable wrd then trie and ryhme like 2 wrds in it, that helped me improve, always write practise is da best way of course
Peace guys
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