Originally Posted by
Jekyll
This was a fairly reasonable write.. Like Luke, I would say that while it wasn't necessarily bad, It didn't really 'catch me' as such. For completely different reasons though.
Meter = Basically a rhythm. It's to do with the number of stressed and unstressed syllables in each line. Ask someone to explain it properly to you, it will more than likely benefit you in everything you write. Although personally, I didn't feel the poem caught a bad rhythm. It was an easy enough read, I didn't find many problems with it metrically. It was your syntactical structures and haphazard wording that threw me. But maybe that was deliberate.
Either way, this was an interesting read. I liked the metaphorical content. It's good to see you active again on RB, after so much freeposting. :P By the way, I downloaded that track by Wilson Phillips. I didn't really like it much.