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  1. #1

    this haunting dream

    This is my least expected,
    Anticipated decline of the year.
    Where im stuck alone
    And you,
    Your nowhere near.
    The wounds, they've healed
    with slight signs of infections.
    Now memories, they've become dreams.
    Haunting, teasing, desending to
    the rocky bottom as broken cliffes.
    Hanging around, as if my heart where,
    the local corner store where we first met.
    Still seperated by the miles inbetween.
    These two lonely hearts,
    perhaps just mine
    Your so much stronger
    I dred that your,
    Your doing just fine.
    Which, gives me peace in mind
    But lonelt hearts never lie,
    neither does mine in drunken emotions.
    I'm here, ready to open up.
    Tell all that i always wanted too say
    Don't turn and run, wont you stay
    forever seems like just today.
    It's been said, Life is just a
    Heartbeat in heaven.
    So for every minuet i feel alone,
    could be just an hour with you.
    God i wish for
    Just an hour with you,
    You, You, You
    Do you know how beautiful
    Your eyes, smile, personality above all
    they seem.
    Will this ever be more
    Than just this haunting dream.

  2. #2
    shit ain never get read aye

  3. #3
    uppin the last time

  4. #4
    demonseed
    Guest
    hey yo..im feelin it.
    Took me some time to get at it, but i am getting my green off the ears, since I been afk for a few years. Its sucks hopping in and out.
    I peeped it, and i truly liked it.
    And I knwo the feelin when you got an emotion u want to spit out..awaiting that up?
    Heres that up u were waitin on playa...keep up those skills.
    I had a mtv video feel..with some typical heartbreak shit,but then..FLASH...some REAL emotion flows in..disregarding teh norm. I liekd that attack. The emotion was set. Werd. AMen to those g-damned Haunting dreams.
    Ive had my bouts.

  5. #5

  6. #6
    Alright, the opener was probably my favorite part of this because it had an awesome flow and it really set a mellow kind of mood. I also like the short simple lines that portray that raw emotion. I also liked this part a lot

    These two lonely hearts,
    perhaps just mine
    Your so much stronger
    I dred that your,
    Your doing just fine.
    Which, gives me peace in mind
    But lonelt hearts never lie,

    ^really nice
    anyway overall nice drop
    keep at it
    Last edited by Space Cadet; February 16th, 2005 at 09:40 PM Reason: accidentally quoted whole poem

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