Dying Rose

[Foreshadow]

I was planted in spring
Not knowing the joy I'd bring
From ones loving heart to another
The love was rich an never somthered
I am a rose.
The sacred flower I so pose
The sun is radient on my petals
I'm growing and I love the clensing of metal
I feel as if I symbolize something strong
Love can be complicated be it isnt wrong
The fourth of july was real great
Although the lights started a little late
The warm months are becoming few
I know because of the morning dew
I'm not sure what to think
But I will stay strong as my petals drink
The water feels so good running down my stem
I am very thanksful for them
As I know the that weather is changing. I'm weiry
It has become to rain and I'm driery
The heat has gone down alot of degrees
I need a jacket or I'm going to freeze
I look around and this sceen isnt as pretty
The leavs are falling all through the city
I feel weak and unsure
I am a good rose and I' am pure
As the dew become a little colder
My petals begin to smolter
I am one year older
As winter comes my keeper tells me
I will wither and become un healty
There is no more sun left in the sky
My stem curls over and I being to die

[Laureate]

Aight...I liked this approach...the life of a rose...interesting
topic and creative...nice to see on valentines day....would
have like to have seen a different ending though...like maybe
the rose was picked and given to a girl, where it died on her
bookshelf or sumthin....a big negative was all the grammar
and spelling errors...I keep telling you to write it in a word
procesor or at least proof read it....also the rhyming was
a bit simplistic...but meh..doesnt matter in a poem like this
...keep writing and elevating...Poet laureate

[sNoopfox]

This was a pleasent piece.
Very fresh how you personified the rose. Had a simple kinda ryhme scheme which was nice to follow.

Good drop.

[Foreshadow]

thanks.

[demonseed]

Like lyric said....
"...like maybe
the rose was picked and given to a girl, where it died on her
bookshelf or sumthin...." hat would ve been sweet too..but your end was nice!
keep @ it!/\

[Foreshadow]

Thanks.