Mirror Thoughts

[ILLusions]

This actually just popped into my head, so i thought I would type it down....

Shattered images lie strung out across the floor
Shards of glass reminders mimic my tears once more
The familiar face I see in front is that which does not exist
Closer look do I dare? No, but something inside persists
Leaning in I catch a glimpse of a man known not alone
Two images clouded by light, sitting on top a throne
I gasp for air while my lungs beg for replenishment
My brain struggles to comprehend such a magnificent
Vision, my picture is captured with a scene so vivid
Imagination screams for life, but yet fails to live it
360 degrees and yet only a portion appears distorted
Can we truly trust life or will our plans be thwarted?

[Bloom.Quist]

Nice emotion. A well expressed piece. I liked how u wrote to this topic. Writing fit perfectly. Well done...maybe for advice try to up ure vocab.

[ILLusions]

Thanks....normally I use good word usage but this piece came to my mind real quick.

[Mesmerize]

Nice little piece Illusions, I really liked this one even though it was so short. Like Lum said you wrote real well to the topic.....I completely agree. Very nice imagery and emotion. You caught my attention from the very beginning. My fav line was "Shattered images lie strung out across the floor
Shards of glass reminders mimic my tears once more"
Very creative. Keep it up.

[Moniker]

this was packed with imagery for such a short piece. the emotion fit well to the topic. vocab could have been upped some like luminous said, but since this was just a quick verse, i think the vocab was sufficient. try expirementing with different rhyme schemes though, especially for poetry.

favoreite lines:

"The familiar face I see in front is that which does not exist
Closer look do I dare? No, but something inside persists"