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  1. #1
    jon wayne
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    outcome

    *talking*
    shit is real when we play on the devils playground.Rest In Peace to all my fallen soldiers{names being called}to my niggas alive keep ya head up and out the ground feel me on this....1.....d-block

    *chorus*
    we go to war not knowing the outcome
    bullets eat up the flesh your whole body's numb
    shit is real when you see your boy in the ground
    shouts out to my niggas on lock down *repeat x2*

    seeing all that left my eyes wide open...
    never be on the block loafing if ya smokin'...
    i gotta remain focus out here in these streets...
    enemies be lerkin' when they got beef...
    now that your gone my mouth is left with a sour taste...
    'cause nowadays my gun stays in my fucking waist...
    we all just human,we ain't invincible...
    f**k carrying one i'm bustin' my two pistols...
    i ain't no fake thuggin' nigga actin' all hard...
    suck on th fifth playa give it a blow job...
    stop crying nigga just how does it taste...
    {gun cocks}while i empty out this clip in your f**king face...
    i love to kill niggas,you think i'm playing witcha...
    when i cock my shit i straight bang these niggas...

    *chorus*

    we got beef now,i heard you want me dead...
    call me a gas station the i fill you with lead...
    you think you got heart playa wit that shit you did...
    now your both dead nigga wit holes all in your head...
    i love this drama shit so when my clips done{click clack}pop in another one...
    this is R.D.F. playa thats where i'm from if ya diss my fam. you better bust your gun...
    'cause with this drama shit you never know the outcome....

    *chorus*

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    You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get deleted..

    But this was alright i thought.....your structure was pretty decent in this, the last verse it kinda got off on the structure, but you should still try to make the lines around the same length so its structured good....The flow in this piece was alright, try adding some multies though cause there wasnt really any in this....your chorus was alright i thought as well....but overall this was alright...keep at it.

  3. #3
    that one was cool... liked the rhyme dawg!! try to do a song of it to see the outcome!

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