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    ...I Close My Eyes...

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    I close my eyes, and see a beautiful face,
    It's not misplaced in my mind, cause i can feel and taste
    the greatness, of this woman, shes been sent from above
    More beautiful by herself, then a flock of white doves,
    a symbol of love, as they flutter, fly through your dreams
    it might seem, like reality, taken to the extreme
    like the american dream, almost perfection in your eyes
    you can look even closer, still no imperfection will arise
    another beautiful sunrise, right before the sun sets
    before the ashes get put out again, like another cigarette
    a 3-d silhouette, because a dimension could never hold her
    always standing up straight, never with a chip on her shoulder
    the nights become colder, but warmed by the glow she emits
    while shes often soul soothing, by the vibe that she transmits
    you cant help but submit, you find yourself tapping out slow
    with your arms streached reaching, hoping the seeds will grow

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    This was a nice piece hommie. I liked the wordplay, and the ryme scheme. It was easy to flow to, nice little topic and all. Started off a little slow, but we all do that some times.
    Can you return the favor and check " Complicated Man " in ma sig hommie. Nice drop right here though 8-8.5 / 10

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    Up You Fucks....

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    Nice Drop, I agree with High class i will give it a /10
    Back.

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    this was a very written piece, i liked the emotional but most of all your wordplay and vocab that was awesome your metas and multies were awesome i wouldnt change nothing great read...keep it up pz
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    Hell yeah man they said the right way to reply to a post was to tell you your strenghs and weaknesses . Well all you have is strenghs, Keep it up homie
    "The Legion" takes no prisoners!!!

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    up.. on the second page...

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    the emotion you described and the picture you painted were exquisite. deep thoughts from the heart. stayed on point and flowed nicely. well done
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    of everything existing.
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