Moving on...

[Nicanda]

Challenges may lead to misfortune
But always take you higher
Improvements made on winding roads
To reach secret desires

Inspirationn leads to growth
Painful as it may be
Experience allows you to take heed
You'll believe me when you see

Destruction strewn on cobbled roads
Never to be found
Now time has past
It travelled fast
Blurring out all sound

Memories forgotten
Leaving Matter rotten
Yet still hidden from view
In diaries cold, through futures untold
I will always love you.

[sILLable]

nice piecema,short simple but still well strung,keep droppin u got skill,~1~

[Nicanda]

Thanks man

[Twiztid_chick69]

nice piece...Keep it up...

peAce

[Calisto]

I liked this, there was a hint of wisdom in the short simplicity of this peice, you know like in movies when they go to the wise (oracle or whoever else) and they say something simple that doesn't seem like a whole lot until the end... haha I'm done babbeling on that, hope you got me, if not don't feel bad, most people don't... I loved the shortness of the lines and the depth they seemed to hold, that is something that not everyone can capture but you have done it well. You are a good writer, I enjoyed this very much, I'll be lookin forward to reading more of your work, peace.

Ps. Welcome to RB, and I'm lovin tha name...

[Nicanda]

Thanks a lot! It means everything to me. I'm glad y'all appreciate it.

[Varentao]

The simplicity hid a fairly profound meaning. You took a real pure stance with this. Some might say naive. But i say pure. Pure and to an extent, enlightened.

I didn't get that it was about someone you loved. Right till the last line. And even when looking back, there are little to no hints. That made it the more interesting.

the last three lines hit the hardest. A nice piece..

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[Nicanda]

Thanks for the feedback. The last line came from someone else, cause I'd been sitting chopping and changing parts for an hour or so. Then I found the poem a week later and showed my friend, who suggested that as the last line cause it just needed rounded off. I'm glad it made it more interesting though. The whole thing was written kinda subconciously, but then when I read it back it seemed to make sense.

Thanks again.