Supressed, It Rests Within....

[Varentao]

The cold heat beats down upon my heart
Clogging up veins with simmering pains
Some call my woes a DARK twisted form of ART
A ride to thrive through the coloured moods
Waves of pleasure driven by misery’s winds..

FLEETING it changes motions by times....
Current state sees red in soul’s catacombs..
Whilst blue so epic sinks me into a trance
Green layered deep by mother nature holding true
Black the ashes that come from burnt insides

Slowly getting up i move into concrete woods
Artificial lights mirroring the games i PLAY
Oh how i hurt those many now laying in my wake
Yet so many oblivious to the hoors they once were
Caught in woven tangled webs of insidious deceit

A spider of life generating variable light in sight
I walk towards a car trashed in temporal hate
Falling to my knees grabbing it's waning front
I shed it's tears of FLEETING extremes in baited fate..
Each drop echoing TIMES amid DARK skies..

Take heed the words bled in mercy
Do not evoke the fury of my PLAY
For anarchy shall fall in many forms
Note by note it shall be composed
To devour all by way of chameleon ART...


This is a re-post. I've re-touched parts of it. Still not finished (most aren't though). And still remains a relative vent.

[Content]

Five Line Stanzas All The Way Through.....Ohhhh
Talent Shown Once Again And Welcome Back...

Current state sees red in soul’s catacombs..
Whilst blue so epic sinks me into a trance

Oh how i hurt those many now laying in my wake
Yet so many oblivious to the whores they once were
Caught in woven tangled webs of insidious deceit

~Could Have Been This..Turned Out Like This~
~Now Jealous Bitter..Etc~
~Nicely Reworded~

You Step Up To The PLate Every Time You Feel
Well And Ready And Never Dissapoint The Reader
No Matter What Angle Your Working From

Necromancer Pretty Much Bit Your Siggy
And Are You Entering The Tournament?

Well Written Poetry!

~Content~

[Varentao]

Thanks man, appreciated.

And Necro is just taking the piss through satire and irony. Whichever direction he's going with it, it's all covered, and all good. Necro is Necro...

...resp...

[Civilized Rebel]

Dude, I bit your avatar too. Notice the happy-happy red skull dude?

Anyway, your poetry is as ever an elevation of an epic epoch in entertainment. But it still went way over my head. I understand it to be a venting peice. I mean, it is able to evoke mood and emotions and imagry, but it doesn't invoke any sense in me. Which is probably my fault. I'm being that great of a recepticle lately.

~Shalom~

[Varentao]

Yeah, i saw you got the avatar and did ya stuff with it a week or so ago. Nice man, i like. Honoured too...does this mean i've been knighted by an anarchist (in the anti-royalty sense)...

[Nicanda]

I liked the running theme with the words in capitals. It kinda went over my head but I still enjoyed reading it. You remind me of a guy I know. He writes like you.

Not that you needed to know that, but hey. Good work.

[Varentao]

Tell him to post something. I'm intrigued. Oh, and comments appreciated.

[Nicanda]

www.elorps.com is his site. I dunno if I'm meant to post that but what the hey.

[sILLable]

tight shit i love ya style everything flows together and well this was a fat piece.~1~

[Varentao]

Nicanda - Seems like a drawer of sorts to me. Can't see any writing material.

Comments appreciated.