WK19: (7-4) B DOT LESNAR vs. (1-3) DaveDILLY (B Dot LESNAR Wins)

[Wuxia]

Regular Battle
Punches due NO DUE DATES
Voting ends on NO DUE DATES

Rebuttal Option

both competitors must agree to it at time of check-in
format is A, B, B, A (A posts first, B drops next, B posts follow-up, A drops final bar)

You have 24hrs from when battle was set to agree on rebuttal battle


You know the rules, if not, refer to the rule thread.

@B Dot LESNAR
@daveDILLY

[B Dot LESNAR]

Check.

[daveDILLY]

here
good luck

[daveDILLY]

Check.

every1 wants u off the site - ur membership is under review..
we all egregious leave, & take those horrible lyrics with u

[B Dot LESNAR]

dude mooches off his boy mira he's a pain in the ass
and if that strikes accordion trouble he even plays 1 when he's beggin for cash

[Spree]

This battle is dope ima come back and edit my post with a vote

[MV]

i have B Dot taking this one. I've seen a few egregious wordplays in the past, while this on was worded cleanly i think if you added a np or something to make it more personal other than quoting his "check', would have made this punch infinitely more effective.


v/B Dot Lesnar

[Mac]

nice battle actually. I got Lesnar in this one with a more harsher execution, his wp layer was more effective to me. I think dave's bar could have used another angle, but it was really creative anyways.

[Exalted.]

V broke

egregious was fine but has been executed a few times
accordion was riskier but I liked it, thought it payed off w/ the humor

[miracle]

You know what, I’m going to go against the grain here and vote for dilly.. I never seen egregious before n I liked it…wording was smooth… I also never seen accordion.. and I thought wux was harder hitting the problem I had with it was the triple he/hes… you got the he-in wordplay off of accordion.. then right into ‘he even’ n then at the end he’s begging.. not to mention a ‘he’ in the first line .. it kinda just fucked it up for me … I do believe that wux was def set to hit harder but that shit fucked it up for me .. n I’m just nitpicking cuz I did like both.. that’s just the part that threw it off for me

Idk maybe like if it was ‘N if that strikes accordion trouble if his breaks when begging for cash’

The triple ‘he’ I hate … and it’s such a good bar I wish I thought of it I just think it could of been tweaked a lil more

VOTE DILLY

[miracle]

I’m actually going to change my vote…

VOTE WUX

I keep reading it and now I’m thinking even the way it sits I think it still hits a little harder than Dave… sorry dave.. I had to change it

[miracle]

4-0 broke

@Spree u never came back with ur vote

[mal diction]

every1 wants u off the site - ur membership is under review..
we all egregious leave, & take those horrible lyrics with u

Dave, just because you have a double entendre(egregious/agree just) doesnt mean it's a good punchline.. infact i only see one side of the coin...if you're saying that "we all (are) egregious" ,, it doest make sense

dude mooches off his boy mira he's a pain in the ass
and if that strikes accordion trouble he even plays 1 when he's beggin for cash

this has poor execution ..."accordion"/"a cord he on"??.. wordplay could have been better .. nd again showing only one side of the coin


this is by a nut hair... but Dave's is slightly better

v-Dave

[Wuxia]

4-1 needs votes to advance to next week.

[Wuxia]

4-1 B Dot LESNAR wins