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    Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2) Fresh wins.

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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2)

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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2)

    This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
    he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
    lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
    you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
    he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
    his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
    Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
    You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
    what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
    Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read!
    aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing

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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2)

    Quote Originally Posted by malediction View Post
    @Phalanx

    sorry i cant vote this week on the battle still open... i feel some type of way about fresh and mimic b/c they're always hating on me...

    pc
    the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
    you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
    ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
    this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
    ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
    u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
    shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
    next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
    if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
    you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person

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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2)

    Quote Originally Posted by malediction View Post
    This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
    he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
    Wasn't feeling this.
    lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
    you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
    [B]This was simple, but not bad.
    he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
    his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
    I like the idea, but feel like you could have flipped this better. As it is? A light jab.
    Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
    You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
    Kinda over done angle. Fleeting jab.
    what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
    Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read![B]
    This was bad.

    Quote Originally Posted by Fresh View Post
    the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
    you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
    Not feeling this. Could of done more with the quote.
    ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
    this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
    I like the wordplay coupled with the personal. Solid.
    ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
    u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
    Decent jab
    shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
    next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
    Light jab, not sure about the rhyne scheme either.
    if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
    you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person
    [B]Slick wordplay. Solid jab.
    Solid battle. Props to both of you for consistently dropping early. Mal, butter flow and a few easy jabs. But I got Fresh edging this with the LotB & harder shots.

    Vote - Fresh

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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2) [OPEN FOR VOTES]

    Mal: I liked the scarf noose line that was about it. I feel like you rush and post early you need to take the time to correlate creativity in your punches.

    Fresh: cattle market was pretty creative as far as wordplay. I also liked your closer.

    V/Fresh those two bars alone won this for him.
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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2) [OPEN FOR VOTES]

    This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
    he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
    There's a decent wp concept in there but the execution makes it a bit unclear what you're going for
    lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
    you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
    It's a familiar and basic wordplay but it's technically sound
    he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
    his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
    It's not clear what the punch is here. Comparing his stature to "picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan" could mean so many things
    Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
    You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
    old and basic wp but technically sound again. Would have been better if he had a scarf on in his pic
    what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
    Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read!
    Naw this was bad. It didn't rhyme and the wp/nameflip idea was way too obvious




    the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
    you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
    creative flip idea on the 'full of yourself' idiom but I don't think I'm quite buying the connection to infinite realms. Not a total miss but not great
    ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
    this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
    Cool, pretty good. Personal angle helps
    ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
    u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
    Nice! Like this. Surprised I haven't seen the wp before but it is fresh to me, and the execution was really smooth. Good job
    shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
    next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
    The punch idea is good and the wp concept had potential but I think the link between lips w miles/run your mouth and then 'garbage truck' as the flip was too tenuous. Maybe something like 'shot with a starter pistol' ? Idk. It didn't quite work for me
    if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
    you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person
    I'm missing something here. Inferior... in fear of ya? In ferry or? Idk. It doesn't matter, won't change my vote.


    Mal I hope you keep at it and take what was meant as constructive criticism on board and improve but yeah this battle was pretty one sided.

    V/ Fresh
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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2)

    Quote Originally Posted by Fresh View Post
    the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
    you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
    Ehh not loving this opener
    ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
    this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
    Cool. On track with this one
    ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
    u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
    Not bad, wording is clean and it connected just not super hard
    shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
    next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
    Direct here but I felt like there were a few ways this could’ve been way cleaner with a different close than the garbage truck
    if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
    you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person
    Cool closer
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    Quote Originally Posted by malediction View Post
    This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
    he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
    Sorry man I’m having trouble to find the flip here on the dead to rights
    lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
    you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
    All right
    he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
    his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
    This ones a little too basic. I didn’t watch DBZ so maybe I’m missing context in the show but I see what the dude looks like, but don’t know how going super sayan would change that
    Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
    You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
    I think this one has potential but the visual isn’t threatening… like he’s just cruising wearing a noose like a chain
    what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
    Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read!
    honestly I don’t hate this concept. Maybe it would be cleaner in audio, not going to act like an expert there but in text the execution doesn’t come across as hard or clever as it could.
    Fresh has this one. Honestly Mal I do think your concepts are coming across cleaner, but I think you’re still expecting your voice and delivery to carry them when read and that’s taking away from the impact.

    V/ Fresh

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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2) Open for Votes.

    ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
    this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
    shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
    next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly



    Wasn’t feeling anything from Mal. He had no disses


    V/fresh

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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2) Open 4 Votes

    This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
    he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
    nah man
    lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
    you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
    you're grasping the concept side of things just need to practice on executing these to hit harsher..
    he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
    his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
    nah..
    Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
    You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
    ehh alright attempt.. missed though..
    what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
    Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read!
    nah..

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    the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
    you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
    decent..liked the concept.. not so much execution..
    ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
    this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
    cool..
    ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
    u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
    solid flip
    shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
    next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
    good concept wish you did slightly more with it..
    if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
    you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person
    ehh closer..

    This was a land slide for Fresh. I mean it's not surprise. But I have to give props to Mal. Although, he annoys the fuck outta' me.. he keeps trying and that's what it's about tbf.. he's slowly getting there for sure.. Fresh just had an all round solid verse and di more than enough for the W

    V/Fresh
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    Re: Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2) Open 4 Votes

    Fresh wins 6-0.

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