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LLL Season 24
Regular Season Rules
10 lines
(unless agreed upon by both battlers)
No Bullshit Allowed
MUST CHECK IN BY FRIDAY
VERSES DUE SUNDAY 11:59 PST
24 hour EXT must be granted by opponent
BATTLES CLOSE W.E
In Mir....
Going 10
Here you're the gatekeeper. a doormat, not EVEN the main feature..
I'll lay hands on this fraud miracle til he walk different, u'd think i was a faith healer
Mirs style so tailored? but those stretched schemes doin us NO favors..
Readin alll them Longplays give our eyes a Twitch more than fans of Pro Gamers
Nerd prob got a dragon tattoo. & askin for me in the league was savage
Cuz he Noomi as a Rapace.. & NOW is 'playin w/ fire' like the Swedish actress
Pull up & have his mugshot. battle was a wrap from the jump dog..
Soon as i CVS...got a clip long as them receipts, so i'm getting a few bucks off
Vehicular manslaughter when I drive my whip straight in this punk..
I have to be Frankincense Myrhh wanna act hard....he'll end up scraped off the trunk
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Your ugly and bummy. It's a fucking fact your that gross
As for brains, ur showing less signs then being prepared against the Astros
+ your a loser w/ the ladies.. no chick would ever invite you to her spot
If girls think execute dude, s'cuz they want him dropped to his knees and SHOT
When i met wifey shit changed. Our relationship became a success
When you meet a girl shit changes, starting w/ her phone number & address
My goons will stomp ex out.. making sure he's down & bruised
And as soon as dude heelys getting rolled on again like outdated skating shoes
You got nothing going for you... Everything you've done is a disgrace
If he looks like a million bucks s'cuz my shotgun unloaded to many times in his face
Here you're the gatekeeper. a doormat, not EVEN the main feature..
I'll lay hands on this fraud miracle til he walk different, u'd think i was a faith healer
Decent opener
Mirs style so tailored? but those stretched schemes doin us NO favors..
Readin alll them Longplays give our eyes a Twitch more than fans of Pro Gamers
Had to look up some of this but cool
Nerd prob got a dragon tattoo. & askin for me in the league was savage
Cuz he Noomi as a Rapace.. & NOW is 'playin w/ fire' like the Swedish actress
See what you were going for but this is a reach. I looked up how to pronounce her name and it aint work, unless you were going for "rap ass", which would be weird
Pull up & have his mugshot. battle was a wrap from the jump dog..
Soon as i CVS...got a clip long as them receipts, so i'm getting a few bucks off
Maybe I'm missing a CVS wordplay, but i dont think so. I'm not the biggest fan of gun bars.
Vehicular manslaughter when I drive my whip straight in this punk..
I have to be Frankincense Myrhh wanna act hard....he'll end up scraped off the trunk
Felt like this was a situation using a nameplay for the sake of using a nameplay. It didn't really tie in to the rest of the bar so this is avg
I liked the first two, and the last 3 were ok conceptually, but meh in their execution. Your wording is decent and the verse flowed well for the most part. I'd give it a 6.5/10
VS
Your ugly and bummy. It's a fucking fact your that gross
As for brains, ur showing less signs then being prepared against the Astros
Aight. A better setup line would've made this fire
+ your a loser w/ the ladies.. no chick would ever invite you to her spot
If girls think execute dude, s'cuz they want him dropped to his knees and SHOT
Yuh. Nice
When i met wifey shit changed. Our relationship became a success
When you meet a girl shit changes, starting w/ her phone number & address
Okkkk
My goons will stomp ex out.. making sure he's down & bruised
And as soon as dude heelys getting rolled on again like outdated skating shoes
Aight
You got nothing going for you... Everything you've done is a disgrace
If he looks like a million bucks s'cuz my shotgun unloaded to many times in his face
What a coincedence, another gun bar using bucks. Meh closer.
Actually a good verse minus the closer, not a ton to critique. Made me chuckle a few times. 8/10. First three bars were nice. If you could tighten up your setup lines, and maybe improve your rhyme schemes a bit this would've been higher.
Vote: Miracle
Last edited by -Coop-; January 21st, 2020 at 10:51 AM
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I like this battle.
Exalted
I like your opening two lines. Nice name flip. The twitch line was hard. The noomi line threw me off cause I had to look it up as well and it fell short of landing because of that pronunciation. I respect the attempt. The CVS line was cool, not as strong as the opening 4 but solid. The final two bars to end your verse were okay. The way you opened didn’t match the way you closed. Finish strong my boy!
Miracle
I dig the opener. Nice to put in a current sports reference and make it work. The next two were strong, nice name flip for sure. The next two lines made me laugh good stuff. I like the heelys reference, don’t see that everyday (here or in life anymore lol). I like the ending, hard to make original gun bars but it was a good one.
Miracle took this one. Stronger punches. Ex had a nicer flow overall but If your last two bars were slightly this might be a different outcome. It was a close call. This my fav battle of the week.
Vote-Miracle. 8.5 to 8 on my scale.
Here you're the gatekeeper. a doormat, not EVEN the main feature..
I'll lay hands on this fraud miracle til he walk different, u'd think i was a faith healer
ok
Mirs style so tailored? but those stretched schemes doin us NO favors..
Readin alll them Longplays give our eyes a Twitch more than fans of Pro Gamers
this would be better if miracle actually had long winded bars. this is aight though
Nerd prob got a dragon tattoo. & askin for me in the league was savage
Cuz he Noomi as a Rapace.. & NOW is 'playin w/ fire' like the Swedish actress
cool
Pull up & have his mugshot. battle was a wrap from the jump dog..
Soon as i CVS...got a clip long as them receipts, so i'm getting a few bucks off
see VS? something not right here
Vehicular manslaughter when I drive my whip straight in this punk..
I have to be Frankincense Myrhh wanna act hard....he'll end up scraped off the trunk
should have done something different with this. flat as is
vs
Your ugly and bummy. It's a fucking fact your that gross
As for brains, ur showing less signs then being prepared against the Astros
not a fan
+ your a loser w/ the ladies.. no chick would ever invite you to her spot
If girls think execute dude, s'cuz they want him dropped to his knees and SHOT
diggin it
When i met wifey shit changed. Our relationship became a success
When you meet a girl shit changes, starting w/ her phone number & address
lol cool
My goons will stomp ex out.. making sure he's down & bruised
And as soon as dude heelys getting rolled on again like outdated skating shoes
nah
You got nothing going for you... Everything you've done is a disgrace
If he looks like a million bucks s'cuz my shotgun unloaded to many times in his face
its ok i guess
closish but i have mir taking it with the stronger hits.
v/ mir
3-0 mir
thought Exalted was more creative & at the same time more forced. both verses were solid.
stand out lines were;
fraud miracle from Exalted
Execute & shit changes from Miracle
V/Miracle
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