ROSA PARKS

[Zen the Dude]

I GO HARD JUST TYPING FAST.
DRIVING BACK FROM ROSA PARKS.
GOT A FIREARM BLASTING GLOWING ORANGE.
MY CHIROPRACTOR SNAPPED YA. BROKE YOUR ARM.
IM A WISEFUL ACTOR. A SHOWMAN OF SORts.
LIKE JOHN WAYNE. I RODE IN ON A HORSE.
NAWMEAN? YOU KNOW ME FOR SURE
IM A NAZI. YOU ALL SURE ARE DORKS.
LOL FUCK YOUR FACE IM BETTER THAN YOU.
YOU EAT BUTT ALL DAY THAT'S SO GAY OF YOU DUDE.
WHILE MY NUTS ALL IN THIS LADY'S POON.
I THINK HER NAMES SADIE JUNE.
I FUCKED HER IN MY BASEMENT ALL DAY TILL SHE CAME A LOOSE.
MADE HER WATCH PURPLE RAIN TILL BECAME ANEW.
WOKE UP IN A DAZE OF THIS CRAZY HUE.
SAW SPRINKLERS SPRAYING THAT LAZY JUICE.
HA. I DRUNK THAT SHIT BUTT NAKED AT NOON.
THAT ACID TOOK IT. THAT ASS IS GORGEOUS.
I GAVE HER BACK STAGE PASSES FOR AFTER MY PERFORMANCE.
SEE YA BASTARDS. IM OUT THE DOOR. *zip*

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[OG Maestro]

I didn't like this Zen, but I see you are just having fun so that makes the verse's judgement much lighter.
In retrospect to a blue-collar verse, you did a good job making me do old man chuckles & all of that.

So, I guess R.P was a success considering it was a comical routine more than one of your usual serious works.

swoop swoop.

[Zen the Dude]

This was serious though.

[Johnny 6-feet]

Didn't like this much tbh. Putting the whole thing in capitals was a bad idea, just came off like you were trying to shout through text. The title didn't really relate to the piece as a whole, the multi's were pretty solid for the most though, kudos for that, but this came off as a disjointed brag verse rather than something that was culturally relevant.

keep writing, keep climbing.

[English]

FEELING THIS TBH

I LIKED THE WAY YOU MADE WORDS COME TOGETHER THAT DIDN'T REALLY RELATE BUT YOU FUCKED THEM TOGETHER LIKE AN ORGY WITH A WHITE COLLAR WORK ETHIC AND MILEY CYRUS TWERK EFFORT IT'S LIKE I MET A GYPSY AND SHE HIT ME TO SOME LIFE GAME TO STIMULATE AND ACTIVATE THE LEFT AND RIGHT BRAIN

I FUCKING LOVE THAT ALBUM THAT SONG IS OFF

THANKS, ZEN

[Emily]

I liked this Zen.
I liked the fast pace of it.
I liked the raw ‘in ya face’ aspect.
I liked the show off factor that I think you nailed.
The first line summed it up. It went fast.
I’m laughing at ‘NAWMEAN?’ lol, you crack me up.

“THAT ACID TOOK IT. THAT ASS IS GORGEOUS.
I GAVE HER BACK STAGE PASSES FOR AFTER MY PERFORMANCE…”

You’re a rock star.

I like your work.

[Nigma]

beginning and ending were enjoyable, if you gave a little bit more of a shit in the middle it woulda helped this out a lot obv, but this was deff readable.

[KnowP]

no links. closed.