suck my dick till its numb

[erratic]

im at the point where one more hit
OF this chronic wont do shit
Cant take it any higher in a verse
cus im at the end of the universe
IM at the point where gods converse
they tell me there isn't a person worst then me
in the entirety of earth history
Go up to a cancer patient and say fuck his story
push him out the hospital window watch him fall ten stories
this motherfucking father are unaware
rape there daughter then put her underwear
ON the dresser as a souvenir
rapper on here i can smell there fear
cus the pressure of this peer make stars appear

[Endeva.]

you need to post up a couple of links to OM's you've left feed on bro

or shit gets closed! themz the rules

[erratic]

what do you mean

[erratic]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...674/index.html

[erratic]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...952/index.html

[erratic]

like that ?

[The Great Father]

you need to post up a couple of links to OM's you've left feed on bro

or shit gets closed! themz the rules

That might have worked in 2005. Knock it off, the site needs activity in order to establish more activity.

or shit dies off! themz the facts

[Endeva.]

suppose so... for now

[cz]

to me, this is great.

[CLA919]

Nice... can you drop more than 5 bars though?

[erratic]

Nice... can you drop more than 5 bars though?

that's was 14 bars unless im raping in 16 notes then its 7 bars. since i was rapping 8 notes that's 14 bars

[erratic]

beside the push the cancer patient lines that 16 notes if you couldnt tell

[Kontext]

I dont give a fuck how many notes it is..this shit was fucking asscheeks...like really you were all over the place, shit had no basis. on top of that it was simple....dont like it

[erratic]

what was simple about it ? how was i all over the place ? i was saying i the highest and crazy person here .

[Baron Mynd]

different strokes for different folks, that's all

personally it shows your potential IMHO

I liked things like the story/stories couplet

sure, they've been done, but it shows you have some creativity about you and aren't afraid to try small things like that

the flow was a lot better than some around here, lines were short and crisp and you seem to have an idea on how to count bars etc so you're cool in my book

keep that pen moving!