no, this is not going in the same direction as dance with the devil by immortal technique. i actually had similar rhymes for this verse but i had to take them out since they had the same ideas as the song. it was pretty frustrating but i think it came out good. i'll hopefully write the 2nd verse later and record. i like it.
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She feeds on crack pipes, bags of cocaine
Hoping that her world would change, but it has all been the same
An only child of an only parent raised in the game
Depressed in this world, being such a fiend she became
Now you could say her mom’s to blame, but she’s raising her right
Talking 'bout to love the life, to stay away from the knives
To stay away from the night, is all the mother could do
The daughter challenged her experience of what she gone through
Her daughter said that she is safer being liked by a crew
But with a hard swallow, her mother knew it was true
Her mother knew that she was out in the streets with drug deals
Stealing from her purse, paying up the thugs to keep it real
Like her father would, so now you know how starts
It’s just retaliation after he was shot in his heart
And that is how she plans of going, just to die with a name
At eighteen with a gang, fucking with her mother’s pain, man...
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i rate this about 7/10 for my standards. i'll definitely post some links later. if u gimme feed i'll try my best to return it.