you dont know what ive done

[bigbrother]

how you doin...

I FEEL GREAT
treat the bank soo good
my money appreciates
on the mic
i dont flow
i urinate
got a knife and a spoon
u know my watch gold plate
i know my fate
i know where this is going
yo i stay by the beach but you know i keep it snowin
ya im still growin
6'7 at the moment
got your game at netflix
but i own it, i own it
one shot ur donut
u dunno what i done
i feel best when the triggers depressed on my gun
yaaa
u dunno what i done
u dont even want to know what i done

you cant even come near me
so lemme say it clearly
big brother yo soy firme
and im just chillin with my simians
big brother big money
young amphibian
ya propofol dreams man
life is so hectic
got my keys in the castle baby
lets talk metric
vaporizer electric
like im soo paid
ya i probably should b dead from the blunts that i greyed
im king and your spade
the bird is filet'd man
theres nothing like the smell of the tip o' my bladeee
n you dont know what i done
you dont even wana know what i done
yaaa
they said im young elite
shoot ya in the ankles homie
thats a defeat
reboot the chopper
all it does is DELETE
i got the OC love man im huggin the street
one eye open when i sleep man
the road 2 the top although steep
i just leap
HB crook.. young creep
road runner man
im runnin these roads like beep beep....

lemme know what u think...
i still need a beat if u can help
http://www.myspace.com/bigbadbrother714

[QwarterZ]

This comes off as lil' wayne-ish to me
the way your flowing atleast, some of the lines are cool
made me lol a bit, either way just put more work in bruh
you'll get some skill and won't have to use weird styles
peace

[bigbrother]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...7&postcount=12
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...39&postcount=5

i just read the rules

thanks 1/4s
ill write some mores

[bigbrother]

ccccopywrite

[Mimic]

Ehhh, i didn't know where to go with this..

It DEFINATLEY wasn't stretched lol, it just was soo short it felt like it was read, thought about and finished just like that.. i didn't really receive a message transcending from it.

I beleive if, you had more of a topic and a storyline to guide you what to write, you could of had a decent peice, but i wasn't really feeling this atall, sorry, it just isn't my style.

Reading Om's i prefer, ill vocab, good imagery and dope meaningful bars.. but i didn't get much of any out of this..

It was a decent attempt, at a self-swagger but it could of been a million times better, this would make up to par if it was some freestyle, of the top of the dome sorta' thing but, ehh.. i was sorta threw off.. but keep writing and hopefully you'll elevate nicely!

Rtf on mine duke.