YungDosia Vs. Crooked Letterz

[YungDosia]

10-12 Lines, due in 3hrs. from last check in.

This is my check.

g/l.

[Mrwordright]

check in goodluck

[Mrwordright]

Id like to make a toast, to the host whos about to get roast!
Everybody meet your neighbourhood pedafilee, he goes by the name of Dose (dosia)
i see this man creeping in the windows of little kids chillin, hes like " this is where i post"
Slowly watching little boys undress they clothes,
pressing his face agaisnt the window trying to get close
Complaining he can't see from the fog of his nose
Listen yung i can end this quick like wun
I haven't even bothered checking this mans riffs or what hes spitting
All i know is he's snitching faster than a politician collaborating with the opposition
I aim with constant precision, my mission, to have this man’s body found by someone fishing. Lying on the water surface glistening, Gods debating weather to send you to hell
And The only time you can fuck with me is because I make you C(see) L

Crooked Letterz


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...786/index.html

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...761/index.html

[YungDosia]

Murder.

You think niggas notice u bitch? ur a low life whos sobbin for appealin
So if people care that crook in the house...he's probly robbin and stealin
And all your punchlines are garbage, ur lyrics ill send to fuckin hell
Cuz nobody wants to see you write letterz...less there stuck in jail
To win in this match, u better have guns, grenades and ull need missiles
If you dont...your gonna C.L. <------------like if you read your initials
So everyone look away from him and stare at me if u wanna see good
Cuz Crooked, I........................will beat u even harder then he would
I basically this fuckin prick with nameplay and wordplay, but it can be worse
Cuz the funny part about all that^...is its something u never have in ya


quick keyed 10.

[YungDosia]

oops read this one...

Murder.

Murder.

You think niggas notice u bitch? ur a low life whos sobbin for appealin
So if people care that crook in the house...he's probly robbin and stealin
And all your punchlines are garbage, ur lyrics ill send to fuckin hell
Cuz nobody wants to see you write letterz...less there stuck in jail
To win in this match, u better have guns, grenades and ull need missiles
If you dont...your gonna C.L. <------------like if you read your initials
So everyone look away from him and stare at me if u wanna see good
Cuz Crooked, I........................will beat u even harder then he would
I basically killed this prick with nameplay and wordplay, but it can be worse
Cuz the funny part about all that^...is its something u never have in ya verse

[The Incredible Hulk]

Crooked
A verse mainly focused on Dos being a pedo...(fail)

vs

Dosia
You think niggas notice u bitch? ur a low life whos sobbin for appealin
So if people care that crook in the house...he's probly robbin and stealin
And all your punchlines are garbage, ur lyrics ill send to fuckin hell
Cuz nobody wants to see you write letterz...less there stuck in jail
So everyone look away from him and stare at me if u wanna see good
Cuz Crooked, I........................will beat u even harder then he would

Analysis
Straight out murder, Crooked still thinks pedo jokes in battles are funny? My impression is that he's new to battling & needs to learn how to construct a verse which actually lands on his opponent. Dos used the name play to good affect & without ever being amazing the 3 bars I quoted shitted all over Letters verse.

V/ Yung Dosia.

[Mrwordright]

nice. i was gonna re buttle. lol dont know the rules on it

I like your wordplay. but it wont be enough, so fuck your cards (Crd) Im calling your bluff
My flow is tighter than camel toe,
and even if you were holding two jokers..you still wouldnt blow.
Why you sending me messages tryna be a friend to me.
Bitch im spawn, and this fat clown is the enemy.
Id rather have crooked letters then crooked teeth,
your pearly whites be so derragned you couldnt even use em to chew this beef.
Let me give you a dose of your own medicine.
ill kick your stomach and watch your chins jiggle,
ill immitate the clown step back and just giggle.
Your scheems are tight, but theres still room for wiggle,
ima anaconda this man, crush his bones with a tight wrap
ima put a mark on his head and put em to sleep...night cap

Crooked Letterz

[YungDosia]

Your not allowed to rebuttal homey...read the rules its 10 lines...

Uppin this.

[Mrwordright]

aight b. well good battle. and you know haha ill get u next time. just consider the rebuttle for jokes. cool?

[The Coon]

why didnt you spit that one first letters? ya actual verse was fruitier than gheynal sex.both battles were ghey as ball sack in my opinion,but letters first verse was actual garbage.no concepts at all,simple setup to punch,no multis or wordplay.just rapin kids this watchin em undress that.we all know yd does that,think outside of the box lol.yd,i've seen much better from you,this was a dissapointment.but overall,better everything.

v=crooked teeth

[YungDosia]

uppin

[Extortion]

nada

vs

So everyone look away from him and stare at me if u wanna see good
Cuz Crooked, I........................will beat u even harder then he would
I basically killed this prick with nameplay and wordplay, but it can be worse
Cuz the funny part about all that^...is its something u never have in ya verse

cl you had jack squat period..........
doisa you brought some wordplay, nameplay........................
i seen a statementish line but other than that you killed em........
v/dos

[YungDosia]

Uppin.

[Mafioso.]

nothing

vs

You think niggas notice u bitch? ur a low life whos sobbin for appealin
So if people care that crook in the house...he's probly robbin and stealin
And all your punchlines are garbage, ur lyrics ill send to fuckin hell
Cuz nobody wants to see you write letterz...less there stuck in jail


crook no hate b ut u need to elavate ya verse was way to simple u need to think out the box and come more agressive...dos buncha nameplays and shit but ya lines def stung a lot more than crook no hate v/dos

ya hit up one of my battles honestly plz

[YungDosia]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...097/index.html
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