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    Arsonists

    Here is my story Im 20 yo I love hip hop and i have only been writing rhymes serious for about one month; Ive tryed back when i was sixteen and quit.

    this is my first song its not prewrite its coming from the top of my dome at 5:23pm right now warning i cuss so e warned.

    {lets go}
    To start this off JayR's a [beast] in [training]/
    With [elite] [persuasion]/
    That I [unleash] on [occasions]/
    Stand tall or [stand back]/
    Cause i will [sonya] in this [rap]
    Throw strong punches like your [man jax!]/
    Fuck the haters if they dont [understand that!]/
    I need insperation, no [intimadation]/
    Frankenstin writer behold my [creation]...
    [Spanking] all [bitters] feel my [sensation]/
    I'm fly like a [jet] Make hits like the [mets]/
    Bang like a [set] commas on my [cheques]/
    Damn I'm the best! Damn I am blessed!
    I'm a [fan] of [myself]!
    YEAH [echo]

    Cant think right now :hosea2:

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    Re: Arsonists

    Whats with the brackets and slashes?

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    Re: Arsonists

    just where i rhyme and want to make sure you look at those words cause there are deeper meaning in it like punches and jax from mortal combat!

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    Re: Arsonists

    use inverted commas next time...the brackets annoyed me imo...and don't underestimate the intelligence of those who read ur verses from wat i've read on this site these guys can decipher depth in lyrics...for ur verse:

    it's aite for a freestyle...started good with the multis....little wordplays in there kept it a bit interesting...but if u made it longer....i think i would have been bored cuz this is a topic that so many ppl do and frankly i'm tired of seeing it....but if that's how u express urself keep doin u...cuz that's what writing is about...overall ok...looking forward to see what it looks like when u put in effort....stay up dude...

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...559/index.html
    rtf please

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    Re: Arsonists

    its pretty good in my opinion. but like sway said that topic is worn. i can't wait too hear ur creative stuff! keep writing
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