"04:33 Blues"

[Rah Gwahn]

In this modern-city-silence I gather my thoughts,
and reach a meter where I can't bare more.. Then repeat it.
In my mind there's a beat that I persistently ride forth,
I know we've got chores...
...Remind me...

Life is like a lady -
treat her well until you're called back,
and never take the beauty for a
cheap porn act.
Tension is the stench of aerosol on all walls,
why you living like you in no state of mind to name yours -
I know heads that have dropped to do time for the same cause,
playing name games for the politics of fame...
And though the rain pours, I'm sitting on the front porch
with an LnB,
sinking into melancholic melody.
Knowing there's a place where the prophets sleep peacefully,
recently, I've got some direction in the grand scheme it seems -
I'm like shady twos, 'cause you see the very least of me
A night beast on the street sniping Sabotaz infamy,
I feel the eyes follow - hollow like the man's got it in for me,
but stay clear - just another night on a bitter scene.
Relax with me, let's smoke a green 'cause we're just unseen celebrities.

[Rah Gwahn]

Rah

[P. Mortuus]

Need links man.

Anyhow, this poem was good, it was like a ode to the streets or something. There was a pulsing rhythm throughout it which made it quite smooth to read. Language was good as usual and some unique lines really made the piece more fresh.

Overall, I liked it, wanted it to be a little more longer though so I could read more. It does seem though that this piece was written on the fly and not thought out too deep.

Good work.

[Damian Gray]

I agree with the post above^^ good poem,

First I liked the beat your writing had to it, a natural flow and pace that you set.
It was an ode to the streets and a poem like it can have no wrong or right.
It’s simply just your interpretations of life as you see it. After reading this,
I'd say your life is very colourful. Nice poem.