Valentines Day is Gone.

[Spekz.]

Valentines Day Is Gone.
(inspired from the RB hit song by Kris Cain - Valentines Day is Gone)
By:Spekz.

Love is always true
on Valentines Day.

Deflated Hearts,
Fall from poet trees
Kissing pebbles
Spitting dirt – Lies.
Through cries of apologies.
Sorry Baby? – Why apologize?
Back becomes present,
Mocking your stares.
Foot steps trace sorrow,
Steadily walking out on air.
Who cares -
Fading into a scenic back drop,
The sun setting,
Your heart – melting.

Remember when,
Your lips formed hearts
And your words sang.
Remember when,
Flowers rained
And showers poured
of sexual intimacy.
Remember when,
I wore your truth
Around my neck
Like hugging arms.

…I bet your thinking about it
Tears bouncing on feathers,
Ashamed to show their faces.

The phones rings…

I sit at attention,
Tense; drenched in sweat
Fingering whore-ish tears,
Who have mind fucked
This poor bastard,
Who after much thought
Is more in love
With his cheating ex sweet-heart.
Then ever before.
Was cupid calling?
Finally, after a deep breath
Of intoxicating courage…
…I answered.


Sobs crept through
Tiny tunnels; torturing me instantly.
I remained silent – A Man.
Listening to her breathing calm,
She whispered, barely traceable
Im sorry – faint and cute.
I love you – Laced with truth.
Time birthed seconds,
Silence humbled by sensual breaths
And then….
…An arrow shot through me.
Speaking on the tip of love
A powerful surge erected my nerve…
.
.
.
…and I spoke as though
the words fought to be released for centuries.

I know baby, I know!
I love you – Let me show you!
I Wrote you a poem,
And it reads.

Valentines day is gone.
You’re a cheating whore,
Hate consumes me,
Fuming angry mobs
Of aggressive sobs
Armed with emotions
Spilt from the heart
You harpooned,
By fucking another dude
After we spent a day
Produced for lovers
And spoke all afternoon
In hopes that someday
We would get married,
And be very much in love.
Now, im heated –
Retreating on you
Staring at a ceiling
That reminds me of you…
…then again, everything reminds me of you…
your tantalizing smile,
moist lips laced in cinnamon flavored chap-stick,
hair so golden and perfect
the wind often caresses it,
o and how your body curves
soft and gentle around me…
…as though a piece to my puzzle.

(a word begins, only to flat line off the page)
for the phone rang,

I sit at attention
Tense, drenched n sweat…….

…..Valentines Day is gone.
It was perfect – Unlike you.
I hate you….
.
.
.
Actually,
No, I must forgive you
I Must have you,
Your love, your body.
Be Mine,
Bottle your Love
And be my rose.


Valentines Day Is gone
And I Still Love you.

[Spekz.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...or-390637.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...na-389792.html

[Soule]

Nom'd.


I fucking love this piece and depending on the feedback you get from others depends whether or not I elect this for Legendary. I personally thought this was one of my favorite poems to be written this year so far. It was amazing dude. Your wording was really well put and it all flowed so fucking beautifully. You had a lot of great lines that just wowed me. Some brilliant concepts and capturing imagery. Emotion was dead on. Keep writing man, can't say I've seen any better from you.

[Spekz.]

Thanks for the kind words..

..up.

[Kris Cain]

nice poem man... glad my music inspired you.

[Spoken Deity]

this is good dude... Not your best, but good. Your imagery was great, did a good job at bringout inner emotions and describing them in original ways. Your use of metaphors and similes were pretty damn good. Some of your wording didnt sit well with me at certain parts, but it did little to really shake me off the read. I'd work on some structural points. Dont capitalize the beginning of each line... only doing at the beginning of a new thought or after a period. I personally think it would help the read along. Also, I think shortening up some of your images and sentences migh help. All in all though, this is good and was a fun read.
And ya, we should collab soon bro. Hit abiona and I's piece?

[Spekz.]

Thanks for the feed D.

Upping.

[Spoken]

Loved this poem from you... i thought you were biting from kris but you were a bit inspired i guess. the lose story was set up nicely with your concepts. loved how you came about writing this metaphorcially and with a bit of your OWN meaning behind it. i dont leave great feed no more i just leave a message on how i felt about the poema nd i felt good after erading this but like deity said it was just good...not GREAT but a nice read.

[Spekz.]

Ya - i mean i liked what he said in the song.

So i just flipped it...into a poem.

I liked the turn out..and thought it was dope-a-licious!

[HighEngineChief]

Someones been practicing their ass off lol. Damn nigga I come back and everybodies doper than when I left. This piece was really suprising, not because I didn't expect it from you but just because it flowed so well and the language was so rich and every word fit together in near perfection. You've become some word smith man and it's cool to see how your style is evolving along with your vocabulary and poetic voice. The topic was simple but it's not what you do, it's how you do it; you did it mother fucker.

Hit me up for a collab damnit, I need to get some work in.

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