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    Fire

    burnin,inferno blazin a federal buildin
    this mornin,firemen glazin down the staircase bringin out the victims
    screamin,square faced women walkin out with children,a babel
    light paced walkin out like babies from a cradel
    how safe is my environment?
    who's saving the firemen?
    irony of the story,flames from an insane fireman's cig
    pardon me,he's forty years old
    sick with a lame bladder control,suddenly,an explosion
    window panes,glass,a/c and all came flyin out with no caution
    in the air,it was tragic
    i pulled over by the curb,like this is absurd
    where's patrick?the guy that threw out his cigar...was an addict
    couldnt have it,standin there yellin....yo,it wasnt my fault
    the cop didnt say much but ''write down a report''
    then followed a brutal brawl,the dude and the cop
    i pulled him down so i could whisper in his ears hey..''cool it,bro''
    back at the station,cell conversation
    when do i get out?he asked and i said 'man,you gotta be patient'
    in a nutshell,he got charged with an arson
    cursin his way through the cell,story to tell and blaaahhh,damn there goes another explosion....what the hell!!!

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    Re: Fire

    Somewhat okay story. A really original topic but honestly not that interesting. I do like how you throw dialouge in htere tho

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    Re: Fire

    its okay...........not bad................i like the fresh topic
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    Re: Fire

    topic is original, but it seems like you wrote this shit in 10 mins without putting too much thought into it, it was a decent read though keep at it.

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    Re: Fire

    thanks guyz,i'm workin on it!

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    Re: Fire

    i enjoyed it.

    (back at the station,cell conversation
    when do i get out?he asked and i said 'man,you gotta be patient')

    i like that cuz its flowed smoothly... and i ve been told that a few times by the cops myself lol. i be peepin ya.

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