can you please leave some feedback on my poem now.noone had left any and i've left feedback on like 10 poems here.
can you please leave some feedback on my poem now.noone had left any and i've left feedback on like 10 poems here.
I'll hit it up tomorrow, man. Tuesday at the latest. But i'll deffo hit it up.
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Darneck! Whattup.
This reminds me of my experiences of going to see a show and feeling disappointed afterwards. This has only happened to me a couple of times, but for some reason the bad experiences stick in your mind more than the positive ones... it sucks. Regarding vocabulary... I had to look up what bellicode means. Personally, I always think it's a bad thing if you have to use a dictionary to understand a poem. But KEEP WRITING!
Btw... lol @ Haiku. You can always tell the RB members who habitually skipped English classes. It never changes.
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not much to say that hasnt already been said. agreed with the need to add a bit more to it... perhaps between the third and final stanza. transition felt missing there for me. on the other hand, i do like the clean / neat / sparse whatever you want to call it style you took... i tend to be overly wordy in my pieces and i strive for such compactness. nice.
I'm good Jekyll. Nice to see you're still around. I agree the bad can stick in your head as much as the good, but to be fair, I usually remember the good performances more. It's just easier to write about the bad.
Abiona - Thanks for your critique. You're actually spot on about the missing stanza. I really appreciate the fact you spotted that. It was a bit of a quick write and I honestly got a block trying to link the two stanzas together. There's a whole in the story arch. I might work on it and try and add on at some point. Thanks.
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