Emoshun (6-5) vs C.A.S (6-4)

[Orc]

I think we all know how this goes...but for the few new additions...

Check in by Wednesday...or YOU LOSE! No exceptions...
At the time of check in drop the topic you wanna write about...
It can be about anything...this shit is about you, the person, you the writer...
What you have inside you that you wanna get out in written word.
Be it your shitty week, the story of you and your girl...
Your inner-most hatred, your ultimate adventure...
Whatever.
BUT MAKE SURE YOU LET YOUR TOPIC BE KNOWN AT TIME OF CHECK IN.
This is to reduce the chances of you turning faggit at the last minute and posting up an old piece you wrote years ago.
I REALLY hope you don't do shit like that...please write fresh and don't do gay things that show how bad you really suck.

Maximum 36 lines...if you drop more, your opponent can request a DQ...
Please keep these verses fairly quick and easy to read.
That'll keep votes and interest going!

Due Friday, Midnight.

Peace and good luck!!!

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[Liquid Content]

No topic. Good luck

[Leonidas]

Check

Topic: If I Can Be Like That

[Liquid Content]

Lonesome Pictures Of Tomorrow

Sit and reminisce of the past images I’ve taken part in.
Paintings and sketches thru sentences until sanity parted.
Sacrificed life for ink to write during nights of light
Let my mind take flight and recite a eulogy at her death’s site
Since the passing of my angel my angle on life seems to dangle
Mangled and still laughing, before she was strangled past fatal
Lead gray slowly forms her dead face, but here eyes were gone
Am I insane? Am I in this place? Is this where an artist belongs?
Stumble down the hall towards the blank medium that mocks me.
Her whispers call and fill my head with helium. Is this a dream?
Finally, I reach a seat to release the screams of my deceased teen
If dreams were pictures then I’ve got stacks of masterpieces
And if screams were whispers I’d laugh at the face of my species
Sheets of grief and regret roughly cover each walls space
As leaves of greed fall into the sunset, upon the perfect place
A utopia beneath my eyelids, accompanied by the hands of silence
A poetic war with no violence, just intellectual thoughts of the highest
Let my mind be free, forming dreams of her portrait
Help my lungs breathe as her life bleeds all she portrays
Pages are etched with perfection, Fueled by the loss of one
Sketches of her are left with the walls of freedom
A corpse hung from the rope that she intertwined with lines
The frame hung on the hope that my mind combined
With insanity and an optimistic thought process
Then, she grabbed me.. I awoke from lost ness.
Before I wondered whether I was crazy, her lips grazed me.
I heard you scream and found you beneath the sheets in dreams’
My eyes ran free and the walls were empty, awaiting sorrow
It can’t be as it seems.. She can’t leave me..
Alone Tomorrow..

[Liquid Content]

Blah. Feed please

[Orc]

Yo. Cool drop man, IDK what the fuck is up wit CAS, two no shows in a row. Anyway, yeah - the imagery was dope throughout, some really vivid shit coupled with some cool vocab. Your flow was on and off though, especially at the start I was like 'oh shit not another poem'. It seems like you have everything down apart from your flow and multies, so work on that and you'll definitely get back into the swing of things man.

Emoshun wins (7-5)
C.A.S loses (6-5)

Left open for feed.

[Liquid Content]

Yea i do hate rhyming. Multis are only to add flow for me. Thanks man

[Leonidas]

Sorry bout this...I gotta sign out cause I'm extremely sick. I've been sleeping all day and havent been able to get on here at all...Sorry bout this