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    Opaque

    Why should you be disturbed by my free writes he writes
    to free the likes of you but see these emcees might
    disagree, but he's unrestrained by critiques typed
    each night expressionism calls and its deep
    from me the candid speech make you seek mics
    what jump man'll make a man jump 40 feet high
    fuck what him, he and she likes,
    Cause she might be dyke...stop it V...be nice
    I try to be but each time....the emo in me
    gets released AT LEAST THRICE


    He's a certified schizo speaking Calypso
    a mouth full of copper and nickel
    the pcp is a frequent ritual...sketched plans
    that were never simple...he was my best man
    but in a world of speed and checkered Flag
    you could say he left me bad...handicap match
    with no one left to tag depression had its grip on me
    I use to wish for the effect his multi's and meta's had
    taking flight on the page the hof was his helipad
    other emcees didn't have it they was...semi-bad
    see him with the hottest girl around like.."I bet he smashed".
    see there was people hating on him hella bad....................
    who knew he'd get shot down and have to be med-evac'd
    I seen them do it to Bob marley and wailers before him
    they use to get close to the stage just to record him
    but it was more than a recording much more powerful
    who knew the world's punching bag could empower you
    he never was super-intelligent or went to that Howard school
    but he could make laureates look like scoundrels, fools
    cause see he used his pen like a Power tool
    hours used abusing cane and weed caused his brain to bleed
    the mind is bad thing to waste and a hard thing to see
    I used to call him my hero I worshipped his moniker
    use to have this glass pipe...blowing out hemp and polymers
    maybe he never experienced pride and worth and his subconscious
    is the world he died in first but fuck a crying verse
    he was reminiscent of guatama enlightened yet half-baked
    I wanna say his name but I must remain OPAQUE~
    for his humilitie's sake I will remain OPAQUE















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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...th-359136.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...te-359015.html
    pz and stay up.
    Last edited by Dayvid Aimz; January 28th, 2008 at 12:29 PM Reason: WORDING.

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    Re: Opaque

    Upping for honest feeds.......and constructive criticism...........................




    I REALLY COULD USE THE CRITIQUES......









    PZ AND STAY UP RB..........................

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