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    4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Treazon

    The Gift of Insight
    Four Seasons




    Spring

    Urging forth for life, this whole spinning globe is our oyster
    Giving moisture to make things grow, upholding your posture,
    Prospering in positive thinking, no blinking or stuttering
    Fluttering like butterfly wings; ending all of the suffering,
    It’s poetic, forget death; I breathe fresh breath for ethnics,
    Babies conceived in my new moon - boom like mushrooms,
    These are the four seasons, leaving microphones a shaking
    Streets awaken…; hustlers are bringing home the bacon,
    Politicians are aching for a higher position than JAH
    Making militant decisions, - while praying to Amen RA
    I’m the start of an era, as winter departs my art lifts the weather
    Prepare the summer; autumn is my brother, shit’s whatever,
    When it come to business we clever, never let a customer down
    Taking a break when fate turns tables, catch you on the rebound.

    Summer

    Summer is Funner- Remind everyone we're
    Human and good weather's bloomin' from under
    the lunar-lit wonder -
    A Planet of poles, can't stand on the soles of the feet
    we keep planted on toes, heels and cold kneels to the heat -
    The wheels of deceit turn and the sun burns in the sky,
    I learn that it's my turn to be permanently high-
    If liquors a crutch, then it must be my leg is broken,
    As I lay here smokin' my behavior is wrote in
    so many lines I'm defined by the way that it's spoken...
    But labeled the Open Mic writer that lights fires under you,
    It's no wonder you can't write what I do
    NO MATTER HOW HARD you try to!
    I lie through my teeth it's a feast for the fire,
    Summertime in the L... B....C 'til you perspire -
    Beaches and sky for the eye to admire -
    Find a supplier of green and the summer scene is acquired ---
    Dream when you're higher than Cheech and one-line her-
    Take her to some diner and later get her naked and sunshine her!
    Another warm night, before light it's predawn -
    I'm seesawin' often between Summer's Green and Red's Autumn...

    Autumn

    Like a strife stricken life- it falls crippled & dead
    losing colour- tread over, ignored- beaten bloody red
    it wept as did the clouds- raining sorrow & sin
    And the melancholic writer wrote in Autumn again
    He wrote of great hope but the people didn’t believe
    How could they?- when all they see is agony- they see
    beggars on knees- praying their deeds be rewarded- we
    pacify our hearts- as the mist breathes through trees
    harassing them- branches bashing brash lasses- sneeze
    they see rashes on hands- their body all pulpous
    but the writer writes on- inking words-works so copious
    that weeds are ignored by taking weed & opium
    Hoping them beggars will evacuate- move to pasture fields
    because when winter numbs my hands-
    I won’t be able to ink then anymore wordy meals

    Winter

    you can smell my presence - blowing through to the south
    no more adolescence... i've grown now so im loud
    my breath takes even the most seasoned persons
    bundled up in coats, snow boots and smoke, cursin
    whats worse is i can knock out power with a little moisture
    spring helps growth, while ive frozen and shucked the oyster
    open the cloister so we can pray in the cold weather
    for years i blanketed the earth in ice, life's severed
    we mistake summer for calm but winter for clever
    and autumns endeavor is being stuck in between
    trees fall to there knees...then revive in the spring
    can't believe i can be so destructive,angers erupting
    but the most sacred holidays cause us all to be constructive
    disrupting everyday commutes,frozen suits to stiff to salute
    i bring out the best and worse, other seasons dilute, im kept pure
    spring breathes warm air like some cure,the seasons mocking me
    i come and leave with the same ferocity,whats attached?the strings-
    no other season matches the destruction and peace i bring
    as i leave you hear the wind start to sing - ushering a new spring




    Spring- Vortex, Summer- Engivale, Autumn - P Mortuus, Winter - TreaZon



    was waiting on vortex to put this in here but he ain't been online... I'm pretty sure just by reading on who did what sections besides my own, I'm not positive, but I'll post some links up later tonight. Enjoy.
    Last edited by Engivale; December 15th, 2007 at 10:26 PM

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    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."


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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    up 2 top.

    A.I.

    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."


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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    i revised my verse i guess vortex didnt send it to you..would you erase the one you have and put this one in..id appreciate it..i like this revised version better....

    you can smell my presence - blowing through to the south
    no more adolescence... i've grown now so im loud
    my breath takes even the most seasoned persons
    bundled up in coats, snow boots and smoke, cursin
    whats worse is i can knock out power with a little moisture
    spring helps growth, while ive frozen and shucked the oyster
    open the cloister so we can pray in the cold weather
    for years i blanketed the earth in ice, life's severed
    we mistake summer for calm but winter for clever
    and autumns endeavor is being stuck in between
    trees fall to there knees...then revive in the spring
    can't believe i can be so destructive,angers erupting
    but the most sacred holidays cause us all to be constructive
    disrupting everyday commutes,frozen suits to stiff to salute
    i bring out the best and worse, other seasons dilute, im kept pure
    spring breathes warm air like some cure,the seasons mocking me
    i come and leave with the same ferocity,whats attached?the strings-
    no other season matches the destruction and peace i bring
    as i leave you hear the wind start to sing - ushering a new spring


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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    done and done.

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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ty-355588.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-355584.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...gh-354953.html

    links and goddamnit why are you loser sleeping? ZZZZ... i know its long but damnit you dont gotta write me an essay, LoL...

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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    Pretty nice collab, all the verses flowed together
    and the vocab was nice, as was the emotion
    imagery was ok, structure was straight and on point
    nothing really wrong with this piece IMO,
    all of you wrote nice verses, all of you keep writing.

    Please RTF on one of these
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...es-355636.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...nd-355565.html

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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    uppin....wake up for this piece.~1~


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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    This was a very VERY nice collab. Some really dope shit in this read dudes. Every verse seemed to fit in quite well together, the transitions were smoothly done. My favourite personally was Eng's part, but I mean, it really wasn't by much, because everyone brought totally different shit to the table. Pak dude, you had that poetic style, soothing, calming to read, I love it. Vortex your flow was off the chain, same goes to Engivale....and Treazon some of the concepts you came up with were very creative and impressed me a lot. I personally liked Eng's the most because of the description, and some of the wording and vocab he used was mind blowing....really made me think. Also because he came with some agressive shit....and ya'll know me, I'm basically known for my 'I don't give a fuck' attitude in my piece, controversy, or whatever.

    So yea, this was definitely a very nice piece, hof without a doubt, everyone came with some greatness, props dudes, this was a really great read. Pat ya'll selfz on da bak!!!

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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    Upping....I'ma drop a feed later after I smoke this cigarette and eat some lunch...promise to drop a feed when i got back on...

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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    bump^^^


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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    This was a really good piece. Each one of you both dropped good, so I won't judge who had the best verse. Anyways, all of you guys flow was good, nothing was choppy, and it was just a smooth read. Structure was good, and you all had good wordplay.
    He wrote of great hope but the people didn’t believe
    How could they?- when all they see is agony- they see
    beggars on knees- praying their deeds be rewarded- we
    pacify our hearts- as the mist breathes through trees
    harassing them- branches bashing brash lasses- sneeze

    This line right here was awesome. The wordplay and how you slowed down the verse was very good. Nice piece here, good job. RTF on my OM.

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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    wow. i dont even know what to say. every verse was real nice imo. keep up the good work.

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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    thnks for the feed...maybe we can leave longer feed back next time.~1~


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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    bump....


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    Re: 4 Seasons f/ Vortex, P Mortuus, Engivale & Tre

    that what it is

    ha
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