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    Poetr's face is bruised.

    Poetry's face is bruised.

    Slow late night jazz rests
    in the bones of that cold
    hearted smile of his, all the
    while new romantics fluster
    in a cluster to use the art
    as date rape; they read
    our works with deep soulful
    tones, expecting it to gain
    a pulse in the mouth of
    selfish clones; His veins have
    been sliced open with a
    corporate paper cut check,
    as the pens refuse to work
    without a sense of respect.

    Hemingway returns from the
    dead to craddle another bullet
    firmly in his head; Shakespere
    makes his death bed with wood
    he carved from the oak tree of
    wisdom and regret, but the wood
    is stained with poison ivy, and
    rotten at the core; william blake
    tries to re-furbish his thoughts
    but with the hard headed youth's
    laughter, it's too heavy to capture.

    The poets tree now has roots that
    are hollow, only armed with metaphors,
    assonance, illiteration and a chilling
    silence screaming sorrow.
    The poets eyes have seen many
    scenes, from wars torn seams,
    to a desparados lonely dreams...
    But this time, his eyes are burning,
    from an acidic tear drop, in mid
    parade... this is a solitary movement
    of artistic slaves.

    This is a transitory step
    to a new order,
    until no more of us are left...
    just an ignorant slaughter.

    In between life and death we sleep
    in purgatory, no emotive words to
    bring back the art of a story...
    No descriptive lovers roam in the
    sands of time; only a bitter sweet
    taste of salty water rhymes...

    Good bye rhyme scheme!

    These carniverous parchments
    devour each soul with a drop of
    ink for good luck; the steps to
    a perfect dream have been
    replaced with a pompous pen...
    and as the last poet dies in the
    fields of broken souls, a child is born
    in a grave, this grave is to be
    forever... an artistic slave.

    This art has survived for thoushands of years,
    it will NOT die here in the fountains of tears.

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    Re: Poetr's face is bruised.

    *reading right now*

    will edit with feed

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    boo @ the mispelled title hahah, but who gives a fuck...WOW at this piece...ill break down each stanza

    Slow late night jazz rests
    in the bones of that cold
    hearted smile of his, all the
    while new romantics fluster
    in a cluster to use the art
    as date rape; they read
    our works with deep soulful
    tones, expecting it to gain
    a pulse in the mouth of
    selfish clones; His veins have
    been sliced open with a
    corporate paper cut check,
    as the pens refuse to work
    without a sense of respect.

    some intense stuff right here man, really poetic, matter of fact its beyond my mind how you even came up with these lines...maybe 2 years ago i would have been able to grab the FULL concept, but drugs have destroyed that. sad but true, anyway, nice starting point, i like how you say the art of jazz music is a key to date rape...very good



    Hemingway returns from the
    dead to craddle another bullet
    firmly in his head; Shakespere
    makes his death bed with wood
    he carved from the oak tree of
    wisdom and regret, but the wood
    is stained with poison ivy, and
    rotten at the core; william blake
    tries to re-furbish his thoughts
    but with the hard headed youth's
    laughter, it's too heavy to capture.

    this was fucking sick, how you involved all of the well respected poets, and twisted it into this stanza... truly amazing.

    The poets tree now has roots that
    are hollow, only armed with metaphors,
    assonance, illiteration and a chilling
    silence screaming sorrow.
    The poets eyes have seen many
    scenes, from wars torn seams,
    to a desparados lonely dreams...
    But this time, his eyes are burning,
    from an acidic tear drop, in mid
    parade... this is a solitary movement
    of artistic slaves.

    seems more like a story here, but again, it was top notch. i mean, how the fuck do you come up with this shit?...im not that much into poetry, infact, i just started, but wow, the way you stated that the roots were hollow and filled with all that you've stated is weird/ but has ALOT of meaning to it. i like how you rhymed too... crazy

    This is a transitory step
    to a new order,
    until no more of us are left...
    just an ignorant slaughter.

    In between life and death we sleep
    in purgatory, no emotive words to
    bring back the art of a story...
    No descriptive lovers roam in the
    sands of time; only a bitter sweet
    taste of salty water rhymes...

    damn again, flowed like butter, and had so much to tell...

    Good bye rhyme scheme!

    These carniverous parchments
    devour each soul with a drop of
    ink for good luck; the steps to
    a perfect dream have been
    replaced with a pompous pen...
    and as the last poet dies in the
    fields of broken souls, a child is born
    in a grave, this grave is to be
    forever... an artistic slave.

    This art has survived for thoushands of years,
    it will NOT die here in the fountains of tears.

    i swear to anything holy, you must be possesed, with some crazy writing skills, im not even saying this to hop on the bandwagon, seriously, this was the strongest, emotional, stand point in this entire poem, you closed this poem out with a fucking bang...you have a gift, and dont ever stop writing, or ill kill you.

    im voting this for legends, you DEFFINETLY took your time on this, and it DEFFINETLY has a spot for it.

    _morph

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    Re: Poetr's face is bruised.

    really dope man..



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