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    Ambitions of The Misguided Youth

    Ambitions of The Misguided Youth

    The Misguided Youth
    Born A Good Kid At Heart...
    But Into The Wrong Home…
    Wit The Wrong Parents…
    He’s Growin Up, Like A Journy Through Life See…
    He'll Face Many Difficult Decisions...
    Will He Fight Through Them? I Dont Know..
    But What We Will Find Out…
    Is That He’s A True Gangsta’! (Aha!)




    Now Picture This, A Little Kid Sittin Alone In His Crib
    No Ones Home. Not A Phone Ringin To See How He Is.
    So He Sits. Wit Doors Locked, No Cops Patrollin The Block
    Candle Lit Room, Nothin To Do, So He Just Sits And He Jots.
    His Words Are Wise And Damaged, His Mind Not Suited To Age
    His Scriptz Depict These Vivid Pictures That Just Prove Of His Rage.
    A Witness To Addicted Parents Who Shoot Up And Then Choose To Share It
    But He Refused To Accuse The Two, He Just Used It, As He Grew To Fear It.
    His Words Matured To Witty And Strong, He Showed No Pitty In Any Song!
    No One Ever Believed In Him, So He Had To Prove His Family Wrong!
    He Changed His Ways, From Being Some Sort Of Strain Of Straight,
    To A New Persona, Movin On Ta The Latest Of Gangsta Ways!
    Catch Him Collectin’ Pennies From Street Cracks,
    Sellin Meth On The Reg Just To Keep Stacked,
    Ordinary Plans For The Gas Station, But Now This Man Has His Heat Packed!
    He’s Been Planning This Bust, Since He Was Abandoned And Stuck,
    But Since His Families Rough, He Figured He Could Stand N’ Act Tought!
    But Now He Just Stares All Scared, But He Knows It’s The Only Way There,
    So He Blacks All The Cameras, Exposes Arms, As He Waves The Gat In The Air!
    He Points The Glock At The Cashier, Screams, “Man Just Empty That Shyt!”
    “These Bullets? Theres Plenty To Hit You Man! They Set In My Clip!!”
    He Took Everything From The Drawer, But Still It Didn’t Fill All His Needs
    Screamed, “I Don’t Want To Kill Ya’ll So Please, I Still Require A Few Things !!”
    Talked To A Man With Demands Of Being Brought To The Safe
    Then As He’s Walking, He Faced A Bytch Who Had Thought She’d Escape!
    She Ran For The Silent Alarm, That’s When He Had To Fire His Arms…
    The Gun Popped Wit One Shot And The Thug Had Retired Her Harm!
    His Percision Aim Had Hit Her Brain, Threw The Merchant In Shock
    So Wit Commands To Be Brought In Back, He Knew There Weren’t Any Cops
    That Would Help Him, So Helpless He Handed Over The Loot
    But The Old Man Had Knew That Somehow He Might Talk To This Dude.
    He Stalled The Thug Who Was All Nervous And Getting Jittered
    The Old Man Now Sitting Withered, As Wisdom Of Life Just Gets Delivered.
    The Old Man Talks To The Thug, Asks Him His Intentions For These Expenses
    The Thug Said, “Old Man, This Is A Lesson I Just Aint Tryna Get In!
    Just Fork Up The Cash!” Old Man Laughs, “Son, I’m Mildly Gasped…
    Cuz By The Sound Of Your Acts, I’m Thinkin You Are Tryin Ta Rap.”
    “Yeah So?! I Got Sick Flow!!” Is What The Young Man Replies
    “But Now Someone Has Died By You” “Man You Know Nothing! My Life…
    Was Shyt Since The Day Of Birth, But I Found I Got A Way Wit Words,
    And My Spray Disperse Worse Then When I Pulled A Trigger Aimed At Her!”
    The Old Man Said, “Son, I’m Just Trying To Open Ya Ways Up…
    Just Know You Could Make It Big Without Holding A Place Up.”
    Now The Young Man’s Confused, “Man, I Don’t Even Know About You!
    Just Talking To A Man Wit A Gat, And You Don’t Know What He’ll Do!”
    Well He Had The Gun Pointed At The Old Man Who Shakily Breathes
    A Killer He Questions Himself As The Man Just Prays On His Knees
    Now He Chose To Get Back, Thoughts Rewind As He Lowers The Gat
    Think Twice About Life… And Realized, He Doesn’t Know Where He’s At
    But Before He Knew, The Man Armed The Alarm, This Kid Fled From The Scene
    Old Man’s Bullet Shots Nip The Closest Spots Then His Flesh Bled Down To His Feet
    The Thug Dropped N’ Hit The Floor, Thinkin Theres Nothin Left To Live For
    The Kids Poor, N He Knew He Existed In A Life He Never Wished For!
    But After The Man Came Out N’ Shot Him, The Kid Tends To Stand His Ground,
    Raises His Weapon In Every Direction, And Shouts, “Look Who The Man Be Now!”
    And In An Instant This Reality, Told Him “This Man Has Got A Family”!
    “Well sh*t I Hate You For That! Vengeance Has Brought You To Fatality”!
    The Man Fell Down To His Knees, He Begged Mercy Again And Said Please.
    But The Kids Decisions Was Vivid As He Pulled The Trigger With Ease.
    Kids Eyes Stayed Wide As He Died, Saw Red And Blue Lights Glowin Bright
    And If The Cops Even Try To Stop Him, Hell He’d Be Pickin A Fight
    But Like The Midst Of The Night, He Stayed Unseen At The Scene
    He Watched The Cops Observe Those Shot, As He’d Think “That Was Me”
    It All Him Hit In Instants, The Man Is Now A True Gangsta At Heart!
    But The Reality Strikes Him Again, This Be The Get-A-Way Part…
    With Street Smarts More Marvel Most, He Made It Safely Back To His Block
    The Thoughts Never Stopped, With Each And Every Pace He Walked..
    As He Came To The Door, He Found The Handle Cold To His Hand
    As He Opened And Entered, The Kid Had Finally Turned Into A Man!
    A True Gangsta See!

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    Last edited by Spoken; February 27th, 2007 at 09:25 PM
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    Re: Ambitions of The Misguided Youth

    great work, man. i enjoyed this alot. very creative... the whole stickin up the joint.. shootin the chick... i was more interested when the guy started talking with him... once the ending came though... i didnt think it was gon be like that.. somethin' told me you couldve been more creative... its still a dope piece.. no matter what.. this shit had me instantly hooked right in... much respect.. ill be keepin' an eye out for you.. seein' if you drop more anytime soon..... i also want to thank you for droppin that reply on my piece.. thanks.. it was a quick keystyle.. if you want to check out somethin i wrote... the piece "feedback please..."... took me awhile to write.. i got a lot of replies on it, too... check it out.. thats if you havent already...

    back to this now..... your rhyme scheme was dope.. definitely would sound good over a few beats i know of.. your multi's were on point, too... not too many and not too little.. it was perfect... keep spittin, man.. you have alot of talent..

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    Re: Ambitions of The Misguided Youth

    no prob, man.. ill try to get you more feedback... smh @ niggas sleepin..

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    Re: Ambitions of The Misguided Youth

    well i gotta say this is doper than i thought it would be. the whole flow was consistant. yeah i love hearing about chicks who get shot up in banks (lol). the way you put this whole story sounded like it happened before. and that guy when he started talking to him. i seen exactly where you were coming from in this... and its true, man... i seen some crazy niggas risk theirselves just to jump in a gang or get some cash. overall your mults and all stuck on the right track. i peeped into a few pieces on here and believe me. not that im saying this about every piece i ended up reading (but most). they just through mults all over the place. well id basically say didnt come consistant with their flow. you stayed right on point. and im'a definitely read this again by the end of the day....

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