(nicotine)

[spitz_shine]

how could the goverment not leagalize
weed but sell cacer to profit off it..??
these fucking ciggerettes got me hooked,
on top of that theay got me coughing,,
smoke one in the moring,shit i can't breath
from last night....................................
but still inhale the smoke till the last drag,that's right,
so i guess im a victum,a person waiting to take my last breath,
but thats if i could catch it with all of these fucking pack's i get,,
spending all my cash on theam,$6.75...................................
i should get a free couffin befor i die from all thesw pack's i buy,,
and many times i tried to quit,but now im tired of it..............
all i do is go back,man i shouldn't of tryed this shit...............
but instead im playing with death in the form of tobacco........
and just smoke,smoke'um up till i die from the last boage...........

just some keyed style ... i felt like droping
some shit about this topic,,,,,
feal free to drop replyz....thankz.

[big j da fat boy]

yo this was aight. it could've been better. it had a good topic. an you need to put more to it to make it better. it was just to short. but it flowed well. it had a good structure an it was true. hit me up if you wanna collab on the subject. just pm me

[spitz_shine]

thankz

[Possible]

Well, the reason I decided to leave feed on this, is because I am a smoker. I understand what your saying, it does suck to have to want cigs. It also sucks about the weed too. But I think there is more deeper ways of saying these things. Some of your lines are really basic, they are to the point but need to be more creative. Brush up your lines too, make them look better, try to match concepts line for line to. Avoid making 1 line a lot longer or shorter than the 2nd. Not bad, keep elevating.

[<Supreme>]

gd topic
rhymin - bit simple
flow - not brilliant
structure - alrite
overall - alrite drop...elevate...

[Rancor]

Aight the topica was good, but the rhyming was a lil weak and this isn't the best topical i've read but it is good, so stay up

[ExPlOsIvE]

Yo, i fought this piece was aight, gd for a keystyle and gd for ur age. I liked your flow on it, it all jst rolled of my tung, a nice simple read, The wrdplay culd b alot beta, but they always can be in keystyles, u put the topic in a nice prospectus and dats kwl. You seem to have the sylable rhymin dwn wich i like. All ovr a decent drop, room for elevating but u got plenty of time, stay at it bro.

Peace

[spitz_shine]

aight thanks............................
if i didn't drop this so late
it would have been better

[spitz_shine]

i will drop many more that'll be alot better
just wait