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    Skin Deep

    Humans invoke a spark fest on his surface...he chokes to harness
    The reality that hes a walkin cloak of darkness
    Created to fall, hes just a perturbed domino...trustin his third optical
    Call em the earth and his crust......an absurd obstacle
    Pigment stained with the pain of a burnt follicle
    No germ honorable to bear this infection beyond a disturbed logical
    Satanic monster stranded in panic....standin with slanted posture
    Distorted statue on the planet like a granite Oscar
    Just a brother with life...covered with strife
    No relations to family visions...just a hood and scarf to mother his eyes
    Blundered with sights of a darkened tomb...marked his doom
    Half of his heart consumed....loss his mom after the devil sparked the womb
    No home to bed the seed....walked alleys while he bled from knees
    Society’s money hungry....while this head’s in need for bread and cheese
    Yes indeed...native to bulimic practice
    Country cherub with depleted status...1st southern comfort...a spring less mattress
    Strong past of imagination that’s vast than a band of nations
    Wishful thinking trapped in a cast of fascination
    Tuberculosis lurkin... purposely murkin his spine
    Its either his feelins or hunger.... he feels is hurtin inside
    Soaked in a willow of shadowy hopes with other broken silhouettes
    Where sweet dreams arrive in mentals... like honey on pillow sets
    This kids suckin...eattin buckets of pig stomach
    Fell off a summit when he was 8...reason his hips and ribs touchin
    Got raped by a crack stiff bum....early homosexual practice
    Done....roamed the earth...draggin...flesh lookin like chapped lips
    Livin under wet cardboard...broken home blown from rain
    Survivin a livin hell with only his God that knows his name
    Gritty amazement...trapped...I view to pity containment
    The metaphor for a damaged pedal growin outta a city pavement
    Holocaust survivor dwellin where the imposters go
    Abandoned spirit inhabitatin a carcass closest thing to a foster home….

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    Theres no limit on your imagination and vocabulary brother man. To me, probably not to others, this drop had a bit of feeling tied in. Telling a story of an individuals inside of knoweledge, and physical torment, aswell as mental. I liked this. Keep it up!
    With the tone of this, Notice...
    An idea was born to the sword of focus.

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    damn...this was really good........vocab and complexity was really good..flow was smooth...strucutre was even.......rhymes werre real dope and complex..multies were also tight....topic was cool...i liked it...i enjoyed readin this,..overall thisa was like a high 8 medocre 9..keep it up..peace

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    LIKED Everything about this
    Once again u prove to bring fire to this site

    KEEP IT UP

    Peace

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    ^thanks for all the feed its apreciated

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    Nicely done Fam

    Good concept neva seen this but have to say it wazn't the most exciting but I stuck wit ya and enjoyed it at the end
    CODE RED

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    thanks 4 the feed uppin...........

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    uppin 4 feed..........

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    kjl
    Last edited by unknown720; December 31st, 2005 at 03:04 PM

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    Ur Stupid Fuck Who I Will Make Sure Is Banned From This Site Forever

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    who me?

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    Ya U You DUmb Fuck
    Dont Ever Post In Here Agian

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    ok.........have fun with that......

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    an edit that post with your verse
    i dont want people sieng that garbage thinking its afiliated with me

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