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    my thoughts in prose

    This what I live for the rush the feeling in ya heart match the feeling in ya guts I haven't seen what it is to be a nut but the feds keep telling me to stay out the just I'm still stepping though they can't hold me down I got to much to win I'm in a rhythm now my minds feeling good my body in shape so worst come I be in the mood for a police chase it's nature not to be the leader of the pack but stan got pinched on so I next in line got to play it cool and relaxed I'm in a mayback with a 8 track thumping dumping on the highway system up can't hear nothing you get me in a good mood you bound to make a deal soon catch me in a bad one you better have quick feet to make fast moves....................

    Just a little something man to get me going vacation I'm back now lets get it going...........

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    hmm

    havent got much to say about this piece,you have made it too short although you got the potential to write. Up your vocab and fix your structure. keep dropping you can only elevate!

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