Wk 8 - Malediction (2-5) vs Fresh (5-2) Fresh wins.

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@malediction @Fresh

10...

This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read!

Quote:

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Originally Posted by malediction

@Phalanx

sorry i cant vote this week on the battle still open... i feel some type of way about fresh and mimic b/c they're always hating on me...

pc

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the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person

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Originally Posted by malediction

This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
Wasn't feeling this.
lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
[B]This was simple, but not bad.
he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
I like the idea, but feel like you could have flipped this better. As it is? A light jab.
Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
Kinda over done angle. Fleeting jab.
what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read![B]
This was bad.

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Originally Posted by Fresh

the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
Not feeling this. Could of done more with the quote.
ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
I like the wordplay coupled with the personal. Solid.
ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
Decent jab
shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
Light jab, not sure about the rhyne scheme either.
if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person
[B]Slick wordplay. Solid jab.

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Solid battle. Props to both of you for consistently dropping early. Mal, butter flow and a few easy jabs. But I got Fresh edging this with the LotB & harder shots.

Vote - Fresh

Mal: I liked the scarf noose line that was about it. I feel like you rush and post early you need to take the time to correlate creativity in your punches.

Fresh: cattle market was pretty creative as far as wordplay. I also liked your closer.

V/Fresh those two bars alone won this for him.

This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
There's a decent wp concept in there but the execution makes it a bit unclear what you're going for
lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
It's a familiar and basic wordplay but it's technically sound
he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
It's not clear what the punch is here. Comparing his stature to "picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan" could mean so many things
Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
old and basic wp but technically sound again. Would have been better if he had a scarf on in his pic
what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read!
Naw this was bad. It didn't rhyme and the wp/nameflip idea was way too obvious




the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
creative flip idea on the 'full of yourself' idiom but I don't think I'm quite buying the connection to infinite realms. Not a total miss but not great
ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
Cool, pretty good. Personal angle helps
ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
Nice! Like this. Surprised I haven't seen the wp before but it is fresh to me, and the execution was really smooth. Good job
shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
The punch idea is good and the wp concept had potential but I think the link between lips w miles/run your mouth and then 'garbage truck' as the flip was too tenuous. Maybe something like 'shot with a starter pistol' ? Idk. It didn't quite work for me
if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person
I'm missing something here. Inferior... in fear of ya? In ferry or? Idk. It doesn't matter, won't change my vote.


Mal I hope you keep at it and take what was meant as constructive criticism on board and improve but yeah this battle was pretty one sided.

V/ Fresh

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Originally Posted by Fresh

the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
Ehh not loving this opener
ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
Cool. On track with this one
ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
Not bad, wording is clean and it connected just not super hard
shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
Direct here but I felt like there were a few ways this could’ve been way cleaner with a different close than the garbage truck
if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person
Cool closer

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Vs

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Originally Posted by malediction

This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
Sorry man I’m having trouble to find the flip here on the dead to rights
lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
All right
he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
This ones a little too basic. I didn’t watch DBZ so maybe I’m missing context in the show but I see what the dude looks like, but don’t know how going super sayan would change that
Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
I think this one has potential but the visual isn’t threatening… like he’s just cruising wearing a noose like a chain
what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read!
honestly I don’t hate this concept. Maybe it would be cleaner in audio, not going to act like an expert there but in text the execution doesn’t come across as hard or clever as it could.

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Fresh has this one. Honestly Mal I do think your concepts are coming across cleaner, but I think you’re still expecting your voice and delivery to carry them when read and that’s taking away from the impact.

V/ Fresh

ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly



Wasn’t feeling anything from Mal. He had no disses


V/fresh

This is personal, not business – Battle of man and mice
he’ll never wife, Jerking Jergens got him “dead to rights”
nah man
lets me not waste time, but take time to school ya
you dont measure up and no it's not a meta for rulers
you're grasping the concept side of things just need to practice on executing these to hit harsher..
he’s wack, and that goes without saying!! Nobody’s playin’!
his stature’s like picturing Krillin as a Super Saiyan
nah..
Dont know why you started, you’re all bark bitch!!
You’ll never hang but here’s a noose where your scarf is
ehh alright attempt.. missed though..
what is he? 30? Still a dependent, just ask his dad
Fresh, you’re not fresh and that when your verses are actually read!
nah..

vs

the narcicism is never ending, it leaves me baffled and overwhelmed
you're so fuckin full of yourself you've created paths through infinite realms
decent..liked the concept.. not so much execution..
ur shits all bones no meat, so u have no right to joke about my verse kid
this Cattle Market Inadequate while he's butchering votes without a permit
cool..
ur soft, pussy.. push me n get ya jaw imploded
u check ya six for safety, when i check my 6 they're all locked n loaded
solid flip
shit talking pussy, lips got more miles than this fuck'd admit willingly
next time u run your mouth i hope u get hit by a garbage truck n die fittingly
good concept wish you did slightly more with it..
if i see red its beyond on sight, if i smell something off it'll worsen
you could be killed inferior even just for the fact you're a bottom tier person
ehh closer..

This was a land slide for Fresh. I mean it's not surprise. But I have to give props to Mal. Although, he annoys the fuck outta' me.. he keeps trying and that's what it's about tbf.. he's slowly getting there for sure.. Fresh just had an all round solid verse and di more than enough for the W

V/Fresh

Fresh wins 6-0.