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With The Lepers
With The Lepers
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I’m out here with the lepers again, my only friends
Are the outcasts who do not judge and take me in
In the hollow wilderness we drunkenly sing of our sins
Our voices thick with pain and whiskey – broken men
Shards of souls intoxicated and aching within
At it again, our mind flicker bright like the campfire light
Fighting hard to find oxygen, and end the burning plight
There’s no might left, I’m lost, and with the unwanted I was tossed
Put on my own rugged cross – forgetting the psalms that I was taught
Replacing them with the many transgressions wrought
Over my twenty-some odd years of living over 2 decades of giving
Myself to a messiah that wasn’t there, never answered or didn’t care
About the broken but still beating heart exposed and bare
I’m out here with the lepers the only ones who stuck around
The only ones who don’t frown when my weary face is around
They clear a space and say, “sit down”, listening to my woeful sounds
Listening to the tales of the sorrow in which I drown
Nurturing my tired brain which is all but spiraling down
Into abyss which, hits this, lonesome penman
It’s a shame the only ones who understand me are sickened and distant
I’m with The Lepers
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This was pretty cool because I feel for the theme. I use to have a small band of my homeboys I would roll around with.
We would be in the street, max, about like...12 deep or so. Just chilling and shit.
Point is, we all had our faults and baggage cause none of us had rich families and grew up surrounded in innocence.
The Lepers, short for those with Leprosy(a nasty ass disease if I might add), represent the people that are out there hurting. How they're people too. How the people hurting are often the most accepting.
Even though this man is alone, The Lepers will keep him company. So it's a sweet, sugary Diabetes ass ending that I can rock with.
On a side note, a Leper also classifies as a social deviant. So that works here too instead of playing off of the sickness itself.
The content, I didn't like it too much. But the story was what I could take away from this piece.
Rhythm 7/10
Rhymes 6/10
Emotion 7.5/10
Storytelling 8/10
Signifying 8/10
Creativity 7/10
Signifying was high because you always go poetic and often or not use excessive and deep metaphors.
Then the imagery contributes too.
Professor Frost stamps this OM with the first ProFro Official Review.
43.5/60
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links provided. re-opened.
