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Warning:
Keep away from children,
lest they burst into flames(
speaking of which)
There is a hair on my keyboard,
burnt at one end like
a black head, oozing cornsilk PUSS
ON MY CAPS LOCK.
AND IT CREEPS ALONG, JUST SO,
HOPPING FROM A to S, to D, then F,
so on and so forth
until it throws a leg over
page-down, and twirls itself tangled
between p and g.
From which poor, incinerated youth
it was plucked, I do not know.
How it happened upon my keyboard,
I cannot fathom. It lays there, curled
twice over, and flooding the spaces
between my keys in follicular tears.
I see it crawl up to the edge
every now and again,
casting a gaze into the abyss.
I wonder if it knows the head
from whom it was thrown;
perhaps it is home sick,
and will set off soon.
I like to think that,
because it is an awful eye-sore,
and I would rather not be reminded of death
every time I press
return.
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Meant to post this in Poets Corner. Can someone close this?
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Gay thread, homes. Gay thread.
It gets a grade of C-
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This poem was different to say the least
but the message was cool.
to me it seemed as a person with cancer was telling this story\\\
I see it crawl up to the edge
every now and again,
casting a gaze into the abyss.
I wonder if it knows the head
from whom it was thrown;
perhaps it is home sick,
and will set off soon.
dope stanza - imagery popped out to me in these lines
overall good read - the simplicity of the story gave it a good touch to its quick read.
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I liked that it was a easy flow, quick read.. but it touched on exactly what I hate about this site sometimes... Like way too much drama over a hair and it just creeps me out when guys get all sentimental like that. BUT I am the loner here - I think you are going to fit in great with all the dick riding poets here - you seem to have what they look for. Now please don't take that as an insult, cause really I am giving you props... I mean if you can write that way about a strand of hair, imagine something on the really real type subject. I'd like to read more - but about serious shit, not hair.
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i hearda lotta lyrics, but this ones clever, some poets push weight - this one has feathers - your style is unique, and sure ive heard better, but whats a good news cast without bad weather? i like how you put this, you worded it well - if you made it less sappy, i think it would sell.... oh well, im tryin it, before im buyin it - aint no lyin, thats why im eyein it, keep on flyin it if youre supplyin it, and ill keep sponserin if you keep writin it...