10 lines
Due tomorrow @ noon EST
3-0 = KO
4-1 = TKO
Lets get it!
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10 lines
Due tomorrow @ noon EST
3-0 = KO
4-1 = TKO
Lets get it!
Checkity. I'll probably post like noon PST. Not waking up at 8 am to post.
check.
your the type to try and e-mell a flu, give yourself a virus, seek help then sue
so
make room in-box for this "weeny" he's due, his shits about as, e-vil as "pooh"
your a nobody with no bodies so how you flow smoothly? name him dope, hardly....
He's probably strapped rapping independent? no, your just a kid with his own carseat...
I got shooters that will paparazzi Kodak moments, pose as moses
because even biblically your touching no one when your flows part open...
10 lines? you must be feeling like scar face, or anxiously want hooked
here's death, just don't bleed this is the shark tank and like always you'll be overlooked!
I 'rose-a-park' on the frontlines in order to fee this fe-mel's 'amusement'
im his mellinfluence, so he trys to rap but only "sucks on mic" - tell me how the hell he's doing!!!
ill post links by noon***
Mic S..
:facepalm:
He's brand new to the game, aiming at Mel tryna to shoot for the fame
Zombie needin' some brains, labeled himself 'Mic' so he could stage his name
You aint a star, just a space case learning to salivate a bar-or-two
I'll shit-on-you, show you what happens when you try to stomach-the-Flu
Thumbs up? Pssh boo:th_down:, my punches running' this competition,
Line after line in repetition, no respect? Better start a Rep-petition,
Grasp the concept, the bible, something! You need advice through your head,
I'm a thoroughbred, shepherd ya life and show you how to butter your bread,
Strength is superhuman, ideas and thoughts brighter than lumens,
This shits a science, you never understood the gravity of the situation like Newton..
Bump.
your the type to try and e-mell a flu, give yourself a virus, seek help then sue
so
make room in-box for this "weeny" he's due, his shits about as, e-vil as "pooh"
Concept bugged me out here
your a nobody with no bodies so how you flow smoothly? name him dope, hardly....
He's probably strapped rapping independent? no, your just a kid with his own carseat...
I think if u worded this out better coulda been mo effective
I got shooters that will paparazzi Kodak moments, pose as moses
because even biblically your touching no one when your flows part open...
Ok, concept was good
10 lines? you must be feeling like scar face, or anxiously want hooked
here's death, just don't bleed this is the shark tank and like always you'll be overlooked!
Better execution but came off a bit soft
I 'rose-a-park' on the frontlines in order to fee this fe-mel's 'amusement'
im his mellinfluence, so he trys to rap but only "sucks on mic" - tell me how the hell he's doing!!!
Coulda been real nice just don't like end of it
Vs...
He's brand new to the game, aiming at Mel tryna to shoot for the fame
Zombie needin' some brains, labeled himself 'Mic' so he could stage his name
I see a lot a potential with this, kinda ok tho
You aint a star, just a space case learning to salivate a bar-or-two
I'll shit-on-you, show you what happens when you try to stomach-the-Flu
Nah, statement
Thumbs up? Pssh boo, my punches running' this competition,
Line after line in repetition, no respect? Better start a Rep-petition,
I think a lil more time on this bar n woulda been nice
Grasp the concept, the bible, something! You need advice through your head,
I'm a thoroughbred, shepherd ya life and show you how to butter your bread,
Statement again
Strength is superhuman, ideas and thoughts brighter than lumens,
This shits a science, you never understood the gravity of the situation like Newton..
Nah
Wow this is a tough choice, ibfeelnlije u both had mad statements n lack of delivery, u see gotta eliminate some of those commas n ? Marks in between the lines cuz it fucks the flow, but all on all I just felt like mic had more no attempts but fuck idk imma give this to mic s but believe y'all will split these votes up...
Vote mic s
Mel got it he at least had what I'd consider punchlines...still needs to work on wordplay, wording, and the whole kitchen included. I I did t like this battle from a voting view. But i was digging the noobs potential on both sides. Mic stop forcing wordplay and references try shorten ur lines up a bit. Work on dissing ur opponent more..mic s step up the concepts both yall keep doing what u do
V/mel
I got shooters that will paparazzi Kodak moments, pose as moses
because even biblically your touching no one when your flows part open...
vs.
statements/no punches
overall: both had weak jabs, moreover mic wordplay attempts punches but none connected with strong impact. flow was good on both ends, just needed better executed concepts. vote: mic s
got mic s takin this, he attempted more shit imo and was slightly more consistent. that carseat shit was kinda funny and so was the mosest joint, mellifluous had that closer kinda which the gravity shit but i felt he needed it worded better. really close battle
V/Mic S
Quote:
Originally Posted by mic s
Vote: MellifluousQuote:
Originally Posted by Mellifluous
Explanation: Mel had bars that made sense and connected concept to punchline even if they were weak.
This has been opened way to long. mic s wins.