Rules and Regulations
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Rules and Regulations
Good Luck!
So I suppose I have returned. Noodle has been replaced by me.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...749/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...740/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...747/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...743/index.html
just make sure u keep up with the work load
What is life but a mass-of-memories, a stance of centuries
In the shadow of heaven strapped with masks and weaponry
What is life, the creators test?....
How can we believe in a book no-one living can ever prove ..god is using your soul,
Look its due to be told the sacred chapters blatantly mastered as tools for control
People burn for this shit to be eternally rich
How can you die for religion, when you're forced to learn as a kid
You think if nobody told he'd be known in the globe
God is just a smart plan to keep you towing the code
I'm seeing it clear yet the people are deemed set
Look! heaven sugar coats life, just so people don't fear death!
A scheme for the wealth which is seen if you let it
Look at "prophets double meaning", it speaks for itself kid
....so where to now?
as i said before, i really havent had anytime this week to write, if i do have some time tonight i'll finish it off
doing what I have to.
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And These Are The Days
I've Been Missing
Innocent ignorance sits on the staircase to ponder life
But to keep thoughts from sinking in - blood had to stop the knife
It's not what's right or correct, truth is I just like to connect
Finding a net while clearing hazardous lies that I try to forget
With five minutes left - figurative or exactly positioned...
...the hands stay aligned with my misery as I'm lacking a difference
Trapping the witness, spying myself with coke bottle frames
So I could escape this mold and watch my whole model change
Don't stop the reign, the clouds send a message for tears
The cries become a silent whisper that transcends within fear
Extending the years for one second to capture the motion
It's a pill to live in a box when none of my capsules are opened
The blast of emotion paints color when I turn to the easel
But the hue never changes, it fades and blurs with the people
Hurting the evil with good, tomorrow was tossed in devotion
I've dried my soul as he's gone, but he's been lost in this moment
White: You had a decent verse, the imagery was good, the flow was a bit choppy from point to point, and the strucure was off a bit so it made the ryhme sceme seem not so good. I felt you could have came a bit harder cause i have seen you do it time and time before, although this was a nice drop it wasnt your best. Keep at it.
Brandon: Good verse, flowed well, imagery was there, strucure was plain but still had enough creativity in it to bring out more imagery within this drop. Kinda wish you both had would have added more to read cause the shortness ended the stories early, but overall good verse and good battle...
Vote=Brandon
Just for keeping me more intrested.
Well....You both came a little sluggish here...I know both of you are capable of more than that...but with that being said..
White- Your first two lines flowed and sounded really well..The direction was evident enough but your lack of time was clear...it seems unfinished..you had a verse with questions that had no answers (had that been your title and topic...it woulda been entirely different lol) But the verse flowed well...that 3rd and 4th line seemed a little stretched to me, but nothing major...all in all a good read...peace
Brandon- I thought you would still drop a bombshell for your return, but you dropped enough to edge out the win I think here..A small little 'reflection' piece with a pretty fluid scheme...still a little short and vague on the subject matter but an enjoyable read none the less...v-Brandon...
i'm not gonna vote til i know if white is writing more.
white - decent verse.. wicked short though man, guess you couldnt finish it up? oh well.. flow was kinda choppy.. concept woulda been interesting if you had time to expand upon it.. brandon on the other hand, your shit was solid enough to win it, the flow was on point and the concept didnt need expanding upon like whites did.. good shit both buttt
v - bc
:hosea:Quote:
Originally Posted by D'Gawdian Black.
you can't edit after both have dropped, wtf?!
White -- I thought you had a pretty good concept going, but it was incomplete. I caught the flow so I didn't think you lacked there. A lot of thought went through some of the lines..too bad you couldn't finish it though..
B.C. -- That was a good solid verse you had. Flow was pretty much on-point through the whole thing. Some good imagery and there were some good quotables in there. One of the better reads I've seen from you. Vote for most consistent and complete.
V/B.C.
damnit brandon i clicc on this thinking your gonna have a verse that would make me nut...i only got hard lol. jk it was too short, but it was good enough to get the win there wasent nothing wrong with it it was a solid verse. good imagery good flow good verse. i think u got it.
white. u had a iight verse it was good, it was short and i aint really like the flow it was a lil fucced up in places because the lines were streached, but i didnt really like how it flowed. u had a good attempt good just wasent enough wasent long or detailed enough. good try i just think u rushed it and didnt put enough into it. mabye next week youll have enough time to drop like u did last week.
\\// brandon (even doe i aint nut but :givesaf: )
lol that rhymed
I win (1-0)
White Winter loses (3-2)
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