Re: Bored. Off The Brain.
Re: Bored. Off The Brain.
no hate but this verse seemed more like a freestyle than a open mic. the rhyme was pretty basic and the flow was cut and dry. there wasnt much word play or creativity to the piece. i didnt really get grabbed by any line or really feel the imagry. it seemed like you were tryin to just freestyle a song which is chill but its not really for a open mic.
anyways if you could leave some feed on THE PHOTO the links in my sig it would be appreciated
Re: Bored. Off The Brain.
To be honest there is nothing good coming from a freestyle written out. I mean if I write something on a topic and dont go back and edit it it too would be a freestyle. If you dont want to reread something then thats cool but slow down and make it worth someones while because its sounds really bad when you say off the brain and its all about killing and shooting and self promotion. Sometimes, if you really want someone to read something you wrote and give you props on it you need to think to yourself what would they want to hear. Sooner or later you can take that style and apply to what you want to hear and those who read it will be impressed too. Change your style I guess. Find a good topic, sit down and write how you feel. if its guns and shit then well its guns and shit but make it appealing. This though was not. Im sorry if it was negative. I want you to get better and noone would get better if I just said it was cool. good luck