Wk4/ Chris Black (3-0) vs. Vafinest (2-1)

Ok, Gentlemen, week 4 is upon us...
It's a smaller group of participants this round.
Too many no-shows...let's see if we get more activity without em!

If reminding is needed...it goes like this...

Check in by Wednesday...or YOU LOSE! No exceptions...
At the time of check in drop the topic you wanna write about...
It can be about anything...this shit is about you, the person, you the writer...
What you have inside you that you wanna get out in written word.
Be it your shitty week, the story of you and your girl...
Your inner-most hatred, your ultimate adventure...
Whatever.
BUT MAKE SURE YOU LET YOUR TOPIC BE KNOWN AT TIME OF CHECK IN.
This is to reduce the chances of you waiting until the last minute...
Then posting up an old piece you wrote 3 years ago.
I REALLY hope you don't do shit like that...please write fresh, aight!

Maximum 36 lines...if you drop more, your opponent can request a DQ...
AND HE'LL GET IT! Please keep these verses fairly quick and easy to read.
That'll keep votes and interest going!

Due Friday, Midnight.

That's all, I guess...please tear this shit up!!!

Peace and good luck!!!
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I"m here

My Topic: Picture in the mirror

Water Intoxication.

1 day extension?

Gallons
[secret]

They pull me in a tiny cell, to await torture
They made Al squill, & I await the same horror
The same whore will come in with five men,
But I don’t plan on being alive, then.
Killing myself is the only way to deprive them.
My knowledge is too important. I must keep it,
Even if I have to die with my secret.
The problem is there’s only one way to do it:
That way is massive consumption of fluid.
It’s my only way to kill myself, so fuck it
A pipe drips water into a 10 gallon bucket. .
If you drink 5+ gallons of water, it’s your port to hell
It dilutes the iron in your body & your organs fail,
So I slap my face into the bucket & start to drink
After I gulp about 3 gallons, it’s hard to think
4 gallons & the room starts to shrink.
5 gallons & it all feels like it’s a dream; nightmare
6 gallons & I pass out, right there.
They walk in, shocked, & in amazement. .
I kept the secret: Death by water intoxication.

I guess Va is gunna no show :/

Anyways, I read your piece so I'll drop some feed Chris. Decent piece. I know you wrote this quick for a no show drop, but it was done nicely. I thought there could be more to the story, but the way you wrote it pulled off the shortness of it very nice. Your lines weren't to short or long, it flowed nicely, and everything was there for a good no show drop

...If Va drops, I'll come back and leave feed on his and vote.

Chris Black wins, 4-0
Vafinest loses vis no-show, 2-2