Living In Hell

Gasious bursts, lashes burnt crisp and ashes lurk
fasciasts flirt, passions desert souls, and clash with hurt
the devil's laugh echoes through the smoldering air
cards are never lookin up always foldin ya pair
3rd degree burns cover the better parts of ya body
lava flows like the mississipi, producin holes like a shottie
screams of terror, seen from error in ya life, ya end here
past mistakes are constant nightmares, in hell they blend fear
insanity can't withstand in me, I've moved beyond that
now people lie on the ground screaming for help and I just yawn back
the devils wishes granted, no hesitation, I'm a slave of hell
it's ungodly, you get whipped for hours for behavin well
serpents attack without a purpose, never die the hurt just stays
wounds don't heal, hope is scarce, forever lie and hurt for days
scortchin winds torch ya limbs, cackling emits from the shadows
scars and sores graft the skin from all these on going battles
and in the end consistancy succeeds and you drown in sorrow
this never ending bought continues with another round tomorrow...-Play-Boy


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nice job, str8 wording, str8 complexity, good topic, simple but good topic, nice flow.

thanks man...good lookin on the feedback.
-Play-Boy

werd, no doubt.

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Uppin this bitch feedback is appreciated and will be returned...

I like the first two lines of the verse then slowly it became simple and boring
it wasn't a bad verse at all but there was nothing memorable about it. much love
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=245810 feedback please

it was iight homie, good flow
ok vocab
it was ez to read
i give it a 6/10

^ dont listen to this immature piece of brat

Uppin for feedback...(last)^^^

Its A Little Invison Of What Does Go On In Hell But Make Us Feel It More With Less Vocaulary And More Emtion.